The heavens are crying tonight...
The shining stars flee my searching eyes,
The storm clouds thunderously hide the night sky.
The cold rain pelts away at my frozen body,
As my heart seeks comfort in knowing you still love me.
...what a joyous night it is.
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it has not even been one night, yet i already miss you... <3
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Awe... very sad and full of longing.
You used beautiful descriptions and imagery to say so much of how you are feeling in this write.
Much applause
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Joyous?
Ah the passion of young love. I like the picture you paint here & the metaphor is excellent! Fine word choice. 
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awe adorible
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the imagry in this is superb, this is an extreemly cleverly put together beautiful poem
thankyou
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great poem Chippers! =)
that is soooooooooooooooooooo cute! awesome and sweet... i love it!
hugglez
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Lovely! Your wording and imagery and flow were all spectacular in this piece! Lovin it!
[share chocolate cuz it's yummy]
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I like it, but think it could be trimmed. "away at" and "still" -It may flow better without. The last line isn't needed- you've already made the point clear.
"The heavens are crying tonight"-
"The heavens cry tonight"?
(and that line could be fresher). "..."s rarely help anyone. Apart from adjustments, it's a really sweet write.
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It's SOO cute!
It makes me sad when I read it
But I LOVE IT!
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awww, this is sweet. It brought a smile to my face on what is kind of a bad day.
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Awwwwwwww.
You're cute!
I hope this ends soon!
:]
PS- Give it a title... Like "Becca of Wonders"
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lolz! that's a gud title!
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