you patriot assholes
I cant stand your ways
always going off about the "gays"
I never agreed with you but I never
argued with any of it
but you insisted that I was a terrorist
so maybe its time I give you some shit
like you did to me, all I did was be who I was
dont tell me this is the worlds best country
you havent been around the world
you cant prove it and you wont get me fooled
Im sick of hearing to respect a piece of cloth
so maybe its time for once I stick up for myself
and say
FUCK OFF
cause your all a bunch of stupid cunts and youre just
all the same, I'd like to shoot you up like game you fucking
go drown in a sewer you worthless piece of shit
Don't tell me I should pray to my "heavenly father"
or else Ill give you poison water
dont tell me education is the only important thing in my life
because I know wrong from right and thats all I need to survive
dont try to force your false religious morals down my throat
or else I'll fucking puke them up and make you gag and choke
dont tell me that the army guys are fighting for their freedom
if I hear that one more time I will be so fucking angry I wont be
able to rhyme. 'cause IM THE ONE fighting for MY freedom every
day of my life, my feelings have been hurt so much Im gonna get a
knife. and its NOT CUTTING ME! you need to see that just because
you live somewhere you dont automatically have to be proud of it
'cause some people live in their own shit, if you told them to
love where they live they would throw a fit. Dont tell me to give up on my dreams because Im the future and today I may be just an Idle Threat, but I promise one day I will fucking have my goals met. Then I hope to see you cry in pain when this country really becomes free, and that you were wrong in all of what you told me. Can you see all the angry punx populating more and more each year, If you do I hope you're full of fear.
Comments
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what a rant!! not really a poem, just seems like you had to get something off of your chest, the only criticism i can really say is yelling and ranting only makes you look crazy, this "poem" really had no point, just sounded like something a guy on the streetcorner would scream in between beers, but i digress, hope you got it off your chest and who knows you might actually offend someone if that was your goal
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It rymes very well!
I like how it was straight to the point, you didn't sugar code anything. You diffently expressd yourself...and I think you did wounderful job at that. The only thing I recommend doing differntly is choose a differnt way to write out the poem. It makes it so the reader doesn't get lost, while reading. Do you understand? But,I have to say this poem was very outstanding! '...Im sick of hearing to respect a piece of cloth so maybe its time for once I stick up for myself and say FUCK OFF..'That was my favorite!
You should think about turning this into a song. I'm sure many people will be able to relate to this!




