he whispered promises
while still silhouetted by the glow of the clock,
and midnight's deception,
and she believed
she's come to this side,
and now she's stuck,
her beauty transcends
nature around her,
yet keeps her heart
scarred with darkness
she cannot (refuses) to let go
she is patient for fate
although it is dismissive of her,
and she will pine here until decay
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Your words in apostrophes are always very interesting, they impact well on the rest of the piece.
Shari
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like a decaying stump gone hollow
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he whispered promises
while still silhouetted by the glow of the clock,
and midnight's deception,
and she believed <<< i really loved these lines, the second one really appealed to me as its so different
this was a very original poem
a great write
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Very nicely articulated and full of vivid imagery. And it is a clever and most passionate take on the picture. bravo!! And best of luck in your contest.
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You are truly an incredible writer sis I love ur writes they are all so very beautiful and amazing!!!
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Some times it is so had to let go, we wish fate had a kinder hand to deal, and all we want to do is pine until we do not wake. Deep melancholy here indeed and very nicely done.
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I think you mean "silhouetted" and not "sillouetted" - but that is just a typo the feel of this poem is deeply melancholic - but I love the way that you have crafted it so ... the mix of contemporary (glow of the clock) and mystical (fate as personified) is really intriguing, and it makes me wonder what the story is behind your words I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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