Me-
am I special;
nothing but lovely disfigurements
upon ink-blot indiscretions.
Repulsion masks pity, thus
I am flawed.
Disillusioned, eyes blackened
in echoed dissonance embodied; bitterness'
complexions battered beautifully
in hideously-contorted ugliness--
My curse.
Ugliness contorted hideously in
beautifully-battered complexions.
Bitterness' embodied dissonance echoed in
blackened eyes, disillusioned.
Flawed am I,
thus pity masks repulsion.
indiscretions blot ink upon
disfigurements; lovely, but nothing
special, I am
me.
Author notes
One might say it's personal...
My attempt (and epic-failure) at a Palindrome.
How to write this form:
(from Shadowpoetry.com)
"A palindrome, by definition, is a word, phrase, verse, sentence, or even poem that reads the same forward or backward. It stems from the Greek word 'palindromos': palin, meaning 'again', and dromos, meaning 'a running'. Combining the two together, the Greek meaning gives us, running back again."
This was the single-most difficult form I've ever written in, so please feel free to tear it apart; thanks.
Artist credit: "Rotten" by LanWu at DA.
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This is one of the best of this form I have ever read!! I have no negitives for you!! GREAT work!
Mel
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Yo Momma!
I have to say you nailed this Round.....Every single word is in order and your Presentation is remarkable ~
I would say it was not, if it were ~
Actaully, the more I read tihs.....the more perfect it is.....I stand in ovation here in Arkansas
I have nothing to critique here....... at all
I enjoy a Perfectionist, but I do not like to see someone badger themselves tihnking they do not have what it takes to complete a Round......don't be so hard on yourself and lighten up.....your talents are a gift....enjoy them
God bless you!
Your score shall be sent to your Host,
Bear ~
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This isn't exactly what I'd consider a failure. Very expertly crafted, meaningful, and expressive. It was just thought provoking enough that I had to turn my music off and really look at this piece for a few minutes before I could comment. I can imagine this would be a rather difficult form to try. I've never done it myself, but now I'm curious. Thanks for sharing this.
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hello
hi ,y name is Amanda i have read some of ur poems ur very good at what u do and i like the layout alot could i add u and pass you off to some friends? -
This is exceptional! Certainly not an epic failure. The two parts can be interpreted in completely different ways, and the mirror is fantastic! You really have done a superb job with this, it is my fave form of poetry. And seemingly a nightmare for others...sorry
The imagery is clear, dark and bleak with wonderful splashes of alliteration. I really enjoyed this, beautifully done.
My score is 99
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Man, this is sensational! I loved it! Don't have a clue how you did it, but 5,000 "bravos" at least! Most excellent! Able was I ere I saw Elba...that's the best I can do! fine!
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you slight your ability
unfairly, you did a brilliant job penning this form and the genre is expressed so very good. Great job
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This was good.
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I don't think you failed at all. I really liked the darkness and raw emotion here. The way you made this personal is exceptionaly done.
I don't see anything wrong as far as spelling or grammar errors. Well done!
My score
99
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I really like that, kinda like a mirror effect.
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i like this. ! the alliteration is quite pleasing.
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