she waited for him
on her front porch,
excited to learn
what he had planned
for the day.
when he drove up
a smile came across her face.
she couldn't wait
to just be with him.
when he was walking
his face glowed with anger
suddenly her smile,
vanished as quick as it came.
she knew this look too well,
he was having a bad day.
this meant a nightmare
she'd have a few hits.
he came up and pretended
to hide all his anger from me,
but i had already seen that
familiar look in his eyes.
he hugged and kissed her
told her he loved her,
then grabbed her hand
and they headed for the car.
as soon as they were in
he started his screaming,
blaming her for his bad day,
it was all her fault.
she knew she was in trouble,
he swung his fist directly
at her face, bringing tears
automatically to her eyes.
she pressed her cheek
to the car window
feeling a bit of relief
from the cold of the glass...
she hoped that was
all he'd have today
but she knew it was
only the beginning...
A contest entry
- Im Here If You Need Someone That Cares by storiesuntold.
925 points, ended November 28, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
any constructive critisism.
Comments
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oh my goodness this is so sad, you can feel the pain as you're reading this and i cried, what a powerful write, best of luck in the contest
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Amazing poetry... realistic and, I hate to use a word you've seen already, but, vivid. Great job telling a story and showing emotion at the same time.
And I have to agree with the previous comments... I would leave before it's too late.
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Oh
It is a fabulous poem ..So well written and so vivid...a real insight as to what an abused person puts up with and why.
But like the other two comments if this is based on reality get out of it now...and i fear it is real from your other poems..
Run fast and do not look back.
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LEAVE NOW!!
Sweetheart, your poem was very heartfelt, and I hope it was only your muse writing this.BUT if this is really happening to you, then I feel you should have a look at my poem and please have a think about what you have read, and PLEASE leave the relationship before it's too late, because men like him NEVER NEVER stop.If you care about your life,then please leave now, my mother stayed, she died and left us kids behind to grieve for her.The family has never come to terms with what happened and its been a long time she was taken from us.
Your friend if you are ever in need....
Angel-anne.
Here is the link to my story about my mothers murder
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4560919 -
Oh honey
If you love yourself then you must leave this person to save your own life .Know this for a fact it wont end honey it just gets worse and their is nothing you can do or say to stop it . For any man to beet a woman is not a man at all he should be taken out by other guys you know and be given the sasme medicine for what he gave to you . Believe me honey many women say but I love him and he isnt like this all the time . But trust me he not only works on your body he works on your mind and will drag you down to whwere you dont think for yourself anymore .He will make you sick and its something that takes years to find your way back . If you want to live without fear you must leave him get out of town and wrn your family of his violent behavior . Save yourself for their are far better men in this world to have to put up with one that abuses a woman
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