I‘m spiraling downward
Sinking into the dark depths
Oblivious to the world around.
Hurting from the brutality,
And assaulted from all sides,
Though physical will heal,
Emotionally I’ve also been raped.
How could he do this to me?
Imply that it was my fault.
Murder me, for I am dead.
Author notes
This isn't about domestic violence, though it may seem like it. See http://allpoetry.com/poem/4773925 to get the whole picture.
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A contest entry
- Give me feeling by Cant force beloved.
700 points, ended December 10, 2008, 57 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hate me today by Til the Day I Die.
600 points, ended April 2, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - titles...more......! by theVIP.
550 points, ended April 25, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I'm so sorry.
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This is proboblly the best accrostic poem I have ever read! It flows and doesn't seem like you were forcing yourself to find words that started with those letters, it is very organic. Thank you for entering!
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I enjoyed reading this. It was very powerful, with alot of great heartfelt emotions. Just...WOW. I loved it. keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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I am very sorry for the hurt that has been caused you. You did an excellent write telling your feelings both physcial and emotional in this write. Thanks for sharing this write with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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I am very sorry for the hurt that has been caused you. You did an excellent write telling your feelings both physcial and emotional in this write. Thanks for sharing this write with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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Great Acrostic
well done and a joy to read you have captured the emotion with such flair I can see why you won the trophies thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck -
I know this feeling all too well myself because been victim to it too and it's not okay, not in the slightest.
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I really like it. It's...well, it's good. Despite the emotion behind it, it makes me smile for it fits the bill quite nicely..
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this is really good
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Great Acrostic
One of my favorite forms of verse Well written and emotional
thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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love it- I got to add you to the finalists
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Wow. This poem has so much emotion and depth. Loved how it was acrostic. It added a nice touch. This was a great poem but it reminded me about how ungreat our world is becoming. We have to learn to life are life and let go of the negatives that get in the way of living because life is just to damn short to sulk about it. Great write and thanks for entering.
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This is strange. I received a note that you entered my contest and in your A/N you wrote what prompt but for some reason it is not showing up as entered. Not sure why. Did you take it out of the contest? Just let me know.
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You already know how i feel about this piece but now that your officially in i have to comment on it. lol . Great write.
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Emotionally I’ve also been raped
i think about things and this this si haveing all of you happy ness slutered riped form your soul...
Murder me now, for I am dead.
this is my fav line because this si how i and many others feel every day -
Acrostics
are soo cool when done properly. Thank you for entering somethign like this for me. I feel this way unfortunately right now, I was emotionally raped for 7 months and it's all my fault or so he says. Thanks for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. -
oooooh this is fantastic! i think this is the best acrostic poem i've ever read, for sure
emotionally raped... woah thats intense
this was amazing!!! awesome job!
ps. omg u lucky i wish i worked in a candy manufacturer! i'd get sooooo fat there though cuz i wouldnt work id just eatt
huggglezzzz!
-adria <3
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Woah! I really liked how you wrote this...amazing! I wouldnt have thought of that! I loved it. Congrats on the gold you deserved it
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This is very sad to me because I completely know where you're coming from with this... I understand it all because I've been there. Very heart-wrenching.
Brilliant =]
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You tell him, YESSA!
very emotional and I liked the way the words ran, as if you were "spewing off"
Isn't that just like them? To wrong you and them they have the NERVE to blame you for it?
It's just their arogance showing it's ugly head.
Thanks for entering.
(sounded like you needed a hug,) lol
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This one took me by surprise. I can feel your hate, and I understand why you would hate someone for doing that to you. It's awful that things like this happen in the world and that people can be that cruel. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!!
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GOSH!!! this is just brilliant! i love this write. I can feel every piece of emotion. The anger, pain, hurt, it is just amazing. So intense. My favourite line of all has to be 'Emotionally I’ve also been raped.' I can relate to this so well. Your words just astound me. If you ever need to talk i am here and i can really relate.
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"How could he do this to me?
Imply that it was my own fault."
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This was an experience to read, painful and powerful. Poetically, the title and the acrostic make this very strong. Your words, however, are powerful enough that even without any formatting, this would still sting.
Well penned,
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Wow, nice acrostic. This is very well written. I'm impressed. I'm not that great at acrostics and you did an amazing job at writing this, and the meaning behind it... Wow. Great job. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Words can cut like a knife, some say they'd rather be beaten than to be assaulted with words because the physical pain vanishes sooner than does emotional.
Very well put, I thought this was about rape, I read the assisting poem in your author note, suppose I was right.
Thanks so much for this entry, it puts a new perspective on my thinking.
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The power of words
The tainted memories that follow onwards and never to be forgotten
The pain is raw
Much love to you Sis
Julie your Pet Spider x
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very sad write, sis but very powerful words. good luck in the contest
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My mouth hung open whilst reading this. Then I went to read the other one- and now I shake.
I understand how it's hard to figure which is worse- the idea of the assualt, or the idea of someone close believed that you deserved it.
If this is a true event, I wish you the strength to continue fighting- you are not alone, and if these events are fictional, you write them very well!
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What a powerful and great acrostic. I know the feeling well. Bravo!
Love,
Amera
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wow this is very strong emotion, and interesting write about the link, great idea! best of luck in the contest
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great acrostic!
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This is a good expression if the horror of sexual assualt and well done as an acrostic. My heart goes out to you.
Mike
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