Wandering.......that is my fate,
a lost soul,no half of a lost soul,
doomed to wander alone for all eterinty
the vaste world my hunting ground.
In the night I thrive,
alwasys missunderstood,
by those around me who hate,
or condemm me.
All because of what i am,
did i chose this?
And i ask myself,
are they right?
Could I be the monter, the freak,
that they say I am?
That answer is yes,
I am, the creature who is........different,
the one who on one hand could not hurt a fly,
and onthe other could live happly as a mercenary.
i am a discrace,
to the human race,
a freak of nature,
and all i want is,
to find the other half of my soul,
the other half of me,
the woman for me and no one else,
one i acn shower with love and gifts from my heart,
without reason to,
just because i love her,
my special woman,
made just for me,
But no i cannot have her,
i am doomed to waner alone,
never will i feel her warmth,
never can i hold her in my arms,
To shelter her from the world,
to kiss her percfect lips,
to feel her warmth against my cold skin,
to smell her beautifull enticing scent,
No am doomed to wonder all alone ...............
Any and all thoughts.
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Daughter of Night
aww I absoulutly love this poem it's very well rhymed and romantic within sadness not able to be with someone u love because of what u are. Love it
sincerly,
angel
aka
lady night
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aww, we all crave to have someone we care about and someone who cares about us by our side, Im in the same situation to look for a guy, and its nothing to be different to everyone else, I am different too, I dont generally fit in but i think its becouse of how im just me, i wont change, but keep looking , im sure youll find someone near and dear to you.
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wow
thats like sweet and yet at the same time has such pain and lonesomeness -
prince i understand...... . this was beautiful and saddingly sorrowful.. .
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if i can find the perfect one so can u ive been through hell and finally found someone and so can you
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I absoutely loved it
Sir Prince this was beautiful you will find that special some one one day you are such an awesome person you just have to have patients my pet *hus* Lady Fallen
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a curse felt , a lonliness so intense
but I am one to believe that no matter how dark
the heart, no matter how clouded the mind
there is one for all even those hidden in the shadows
very good description, a romantic,and yet depressing hold
sympathy goes from the reader to the writer
a hope that in a future writing there will be an announcement of lonliness that faded
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This is great
I enjoyed every work of it and hope that i can read more from you!!!
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i'm impressed. i can really relate to the poem. i've been there a lot. the only thing i could think of, is a few spelling errors. the flow wasn't bad but interesting. but nonetheless, great poem.
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wow, this is really good. There could be a little work done, in some parts it rough but over all it's really good.
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Hm, interesting.
On the contrary to one of the other comments, I didn't think it was too long; some grammatical errors (not that it was horribly difficult to read) and I think you veered 2 places with this poem...
Partially to the 2 types of personality inside you (i.e. "Good" and "Evil") and partially to finding your love; but I could definitely get a sense of what's going through your head & how your emotions correlate to that.
If you lust for love, you'll never get what you're looking for though...just remember that
lol
Good write overall!
Take care,
E. -
its even more amazeing the seccond time around.
xoxo
ellie -
I love it. Sometimes I feel that way. I most defantly love: Paragraph 8 to find the other half of my soul,
the other half of me,
the woman for me and no one else,
one i acn shower with love and gifts from my heart,
and I also loveL Paragraph 11 To shelter her from the world,
to kiss her percfect lips,
to feel her warmth against my cold skin,
to smell her beautifull enticing scent,
Its also true, but so beautiful. I absouluty love it. Great job.
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sweet
this is a really good poem!! shows emotion..good, good
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LOVE IT
I LOVE ITAND YOU BETTER RIGHT MORE!!!!
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I LOVED THIS POEM!
Awe!I know how you feel.In my family I am the black sheep...the freaky one that doesn't quite belong.You seem like you have a heart of gold!Also remember that EVERYONE has a dark side and you are not a freak but an honest and brave soul for confronting that thought while others would dismiss it as a load of crap.There are not only good people and bad people but there is a whole other group...those that are both!50/50 is what we are and that is just perfect.We can be tough when the situation calls for it and kind when no one is pissing us off,lol!Nobody respects the people who have no backbone and deny themselves to be everyone elses' doormat and nobody likes people that are never sweet at all,so I think the way you are is just right!
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To shelter her from the world,
to kiss her percfect lips,
to feel her warmth against my cold skin,
to smell her beautifull enticing scent,
THAT WAS MY FAVORITE.
if only a guy would say that about me.
honestly, this poem was a but of a chore to read.
it was really good and heartfelt, amazing, well written, all the jazz, but it is so long, it was a chore to read.
honestly though.
you are a romantic.
a poet.
and an amazing BF to anygirl who has you.
great, if somewhat LONG, write
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wonderful
that makes me sad. but its becuase i feel that same emptyness and am currently looking to fill it but it seams near impossiable i understand.
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Amazing
I love this poem...I know what it is like to feel uncomplete...so I understand where you are comming from...great job!
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Very deep and dark! I love it! Its a truely beautiful poem.
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beautiful....i love it!
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