touching Lace
light to the senses
finger-tips
are crescent moons
stilling waters
of the heart
Passions rise
and
fall
quivering V's
so vulnerable inside
Once seen
Nothing linear
nothing taken
no boundary
A contest entry
- Word Prompt II - by Manda Kathryn.
400 points, ended November 17, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the crescent of maternal moon by Pamela A Lamppa.
1050 points, ended December 1, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites; short poems only. by deadcolor dreams.
900 points, ended April 6, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
this in the early stages, it's posted here or convenience, far from finished,
Comments
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Hi Isabella,
This is a wonderful poem of gentleness and tenderness. What are the "quivering V's?" Your last four lines just blew me away! For me they are about acceptance and being present in the here and now - you describe that moment so beautifully. The title fits very well since you writing about beauty and
'Crescent moons' are beautiful!
Gratefully,
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thank you
thank you.
best wishes,
Isabella
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This is just great, the opening stanza was the best part of the whole thing. Great job and good luck, the images are beautiful. Thanks for entering.
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Ohh.. great stuff! I highly enjoyed this one and I hope to read more from you in the future!
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I had a couple of different takes on this write. Both read beautiful in my mind. I would really like to know what was going through your mind when you wrote this? Congrats on the Honorable I'm glad I read this one *S*.
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thank you
thank you for your words.
I was remembering being loved,
best wishes,
Isabella
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I like this piece, but would have liked a bit more adherence to the prompt. Missing the maternal aspects, still, a lovely lovely poem that should not go unnoticed or unmentioned.
I particularly liked
"finger tips are crescent moons stilling waters of the heart"
Now that is an amazing line.
Thank you for a splendid entry. ~Pamela 
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No boundary...
an excellent ending for such a theme.
And I believe this is only slightly unfinished
and that you will fill-in as naturally as it was
started. I have no offers of suggestions, only
the encouragement of saying this write is
one in ascention. Blue
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:)
thank you,
I appreciate your words,
best wishes,
Isabella
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I really like the delicacy your poem pocesses; there is beauty and faith held in with the imagery
Gorgeous write; if you ever add anything to it (though I think its great as is) let me know please, I'd love to see
♥
Thank You for Your Entry & Best of Luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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what a delicate touch you have
lovely
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