Someone please take away the pain
Make the gashes mend
Let the burns heal
And the bruises fade
You may not see them
But I feel them
I feel the pain that shouldn't be there
How can I possibly feel heartache?
When I never had a heart to begin with
But somehow you found it
And took it for yours
But never really gave it back
When I look at you
There's a stabbing in my chest
Where that stolen heart belongs
A burning I can't stop
A pain I can't handle
These tears shouldn't be here
Rolling down my cheeks
Yet they're cold as ice
While my chest burns furiously
You can keep my heart
I don't want it back
I just want the pain to leave
And to heal these open wounds
That never should have existed
Author notes
funny moment that pissed me off: my boyfriend crashed on my couch and around 3 am when my sis put a blanket over us, he kissed her thinking it was me, while he was still asleep
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love lost does hurt, thank you for entering
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Judge's Verdict.
I like the emotion behind this poem, because it's something that everyone experiences at least once in their life, but I didn't think it was particularly well written; for a few lines the poem would go along great, but then the 'tune' (if you will) of the poem completely changed, and I found this kind of distracting.
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When I look at you
There's a stabbing in my chest -
Strong emotions can often bring about the bests our muse has to offer. God's little way of telling us to write when we need a release. Thank you for entering and best of luck in the contest.
-Løki
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nice write if you r doing what it says in line 2 i will hunt u down well no i wont bt i want you around or else think about how misrable
but this is a great write
please dont do it
your friend
dan ploss
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i like it. the notebook background adds a muse-i-ness to it, and there is a lot of potential. perhaps, instead of saying you had no heart and then contradicting it, you could say that you never thought you had a heart. Nice write.
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