The few prevailing winds that blow,
That have established an Oasis in my heart
Have taught that life is a wonder,
with deep occasions of the happy and the sad
Although I may at times doubt who I am
And cries of anger gather.
I still see beauty in God's creation
And taste the kiss from nature,
as I pass through the seasons of life
Just one Rose in a galaxy of riches
Of which, in spirit, I shall forever exist
By Robert W. fox
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this is awesome and so well penned'
the rose you are dwells from the thorn
grow to love.. with each day that brings
Hugs love♥
this i have read for the second time
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Please follow the rules.
This is a very simply piece, but the flow and vocabulary bring it up to a new level. I think it is very well written. Thank you.
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Well, I'm not going to say I agree. I'm not into looking for the beauty in everything. None the less, to each his own.
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I'm not completely sure how this fits into Baldwin's quote, but that may just be me being thick
A nice write nonetheless. Well done and good luck!
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Profoundly beautiful, and most original, poet! All the best in the contest!
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Wow! I really liked that. Very simple and beautiful.
Favorite lines: Just one Rose in a galaxy of riches
Of which, in spirit, I shall forever exist
Needs improvement: I can't think of any at the time.
Overall grade: 8
Nice work!
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I am left speechless at the beauty
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Just one Rose in a galaxy of riches
Of which, in spirit, I shall forever exist
beautifull this line
for there is a rose out there for us all
In all God's abundant wealth
you are an awesome poet
with a gifted pen
I love your work
Hugs my dear friend
Angel♥
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As I pass through the seasons of life... Very nice sir.
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beautiful! i love it! keep it up robert!
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Very nice write, lovely and calming to read,
good luck =)
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"I still see beauty in God's creation
And taste the kiss from nature"
That is a fine pair of lines and a wonderful target for us all to aim for. May you feel the kiss for many years yet!
Good Luck in the contest.
Jim
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I have never doubted who i am.An ignorant fool who lived these years (so far) proving to myself that i have learned nothing.In fact i am so ignorant that i will not know when I'm dead
A beautiful worded piece that even an ignoramus like me can enjoy immensely
Excellent Good luck in the contest
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Absolutely beautiful!
Understanding myself is something I strive for and hope one day I will reach my own 'Eureka' day. I hope in the knowing I can word it as gracefully as you. Regards, Von
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so true, life continues, even through over the hills of our minds,searching after death will be a thought for us until our demises, thank you for this entry
good luck
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Beautiful! I just love it, It wasn't exactly what I was expecting, but in saying that I loved it, it took me by surprise.
It is a beautiful take on life and living. We all doubt ourselves, but we know God doesn't make rubbish, everything has a purpose.
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Very thought provoking
Not sure it was Gods creation but it evolved beautifully until it was infested by us fleas, still it's not long now before like a dog she has a damned good scratch and a nice shake and only the strongest fleas will be left, then the wonder and beauty should return.
Very nice piece
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A very heartfelt commentary on your place in the cosmos. Well done my friend - the happiest of trails to you.
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Is there some sort of logic in your almost random use of capital letters? Just asking, Bob, just asking.......
Not much beauty in creation at the moment, with all the dead kiddies in Palestine.
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You know
Nobody is required to read my poetry & yes the world is in a bad state. However I must ask this, Why are you not so concerned with the many thousands being killed in places like the Sudan by Islamic fanatics?
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This could be one of most profound things I've read. I admire that the beauty of the world and of life are not always conventional and one layer thick. Each person will have great pains and great joys, and to not let one overshadow and still embrace the mysteries of life is the best understanding I think we as mortal people can achieve.
Oh, and the last two lines right there are down right breath-taking.
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
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just one rose in a galaxy of riches...
how did you ever think of this great line? by the way r u a fireman if not too bad i wrote put my fire out about a fireman i saw one day
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In the third line I think you should use "that" instead of "the". In the first line of the second stanza you should remove the word "just". The last three lines of the second stanza should be separated at lines four and five with a period in between and line five as a new line to complete that stanza. I love the imagery throughout. With the corrections I have made I think that the meter would improve greatly. I hope you understand that this is only my critique and you placed this in the critical review section, therefore I hope I have helped. Keep writing you've got promise!
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Beautiful write
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ohhhhh my goodness I love love love this its sooo beautiful one of the nicest poems I have read here on AP!!!
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even in sadness or darkness there is still happiness and light, we should not take these moments for granted because some do not realize how important they can be.
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Wow, that was outstanding. You used really nice metaphors and similes to make it really a vivid image in the reader's mind. It had good flow and word choice. I understand when you said "doubting just who I am". I sadly have felt that way sometimes but knowing yourself is a complete story in itself.
A very nice piece, you are a great poet
~Docteh
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You are what I've always called a "rainbows and butterflies" poet something I could never be. You always seem to find the silver lining in the trials of your life. I love it!!
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Again you leave us with much to ponder on
As usual your writes are a pleasure to read
Keep It up my friend I'm a fan
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Outstanding
I liked the way you ponder life itself and find beauty as well as darkness. This is full of soul-searching but I liked the sense of self acceptance and the image with the rose at the end of the poem was very poetic. A pleasure to read.
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ooo omg u are so amazing!!!!
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Through pain we may know our true self.
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i don't understand this poem that well but i do like it, i enjoyed it. a wonderful poem, keep it flowing
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Just a wonderful write Bob. Through dark times, we can still see the beauty in life.
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So refreshing to read this--thank you! I can attest that it is hard to reach the point of being able to write something like this, but it so so worthwhile! Keep on keeping on!
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I absolutely love this. It's beautiful and meaningful from the inside out. It's a wonderful feeling to understand yourself.
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
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Great poem you have written with great depth. Love the last stanza "Just one rose in a galaxy of riches Of Which, in spirit, I shall forever exist. Says alot Bob in expressing oneself.
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to understand ones self is to understand the beliefs of ones heart...the simple beauty of nature around can cause an emotion avalanche...the richness of a rose,changing of the seasons, and even though we may doubt ,we will always know that the answers softly lie within you and i..
an excellent read~~~~
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a gorgeous write ... appreciate nature... too many people with busy schedules etc just walk past and miss the simplest most beautiful things lin life. your spirit will forever exist in your poetry and peoples hearts.
huge hugs,
georgie,
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Very deep my friend and another brill write... I guess we all doubt ourselves at times... I know I do, thank you for sharing xx
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Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Bob... this is DEEEEEEP!!!! You have such a gift of expression and always write with grace and intensity...It would be wonderful if all could see themselves as you.."just one rose in the galaxy of riches"...just brilliant...Thanks for sharing your words with us here again!!!!~~~Toni~~~
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Wonderful Write!!!!!!!!!!!
Tis a lovely poem you have penned me friend.
. Yes you are a rose among many but are so unique in many ways. Just be you because you are so nice just the way you are. 
Have a wonderful blessed weekend.
Take care,
sandy
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Just beautiful Bob! Self reflection is so often something we don't leave enough time for.
Thank you so much for sharing.
Gaylene
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A great write Bob. I really love the second stanza a lot
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WOW!! you paint pretty pictures throughout this poem. 'And taste the kiss from nature', 'Just on rose in a galaxy of riches'. Good write I liked it, short simple, to the point, and full of poetic devices.
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Life is a beautiful journey my friend.One that is better with friends like you within.And we shall forever exist
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Thanks for sharing your heart and soul.
Tony
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Very nicely penned I Love the imagery, and the symbolism of truly knowing who oneself is. Bravo!
ASM
AKA Raymond -
I sit and wait
For your next write that stems from your pen,
your words are filled with so much sight
a blessings to all that read and a welcome your poem and story's.
Thank you Bob.
its always a pleasure
Rend
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Excellent stuff here. Now I understand your comment on Huey so much better. Reflections on life are often wonderful; sort the grain from the chaff, so to speak.
Well done Bob.
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Excellently done...
This is a deeply reflective piece. I couldn't help but recognize so much of this traits in myself as well. This part really brought it home for me:
"...life is a wonder,
with deep occasions of the happy and the sad".
Great job penning this one Bob.
AsIThink...
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who one is
we always wonder, but then we look in the mirror and it reflects us a very loving human being! Lil nice poem here Bob, thank you for sharing as always
Linda
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well bob, how are you on this fine day, a beautiful poem, very deep and thoughtful, touches the spirit and lets it soar free through the beauty of nature,
hugs,
shane
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Excellent Bob, I love the last 2 lines
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Very lovely my friend. I think this is beautifully written and written from your heart.
Lovely!
~*Lady
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I like this
it seemed, to me, to say that the process of coming to understand oneself is as infinite as the spirit
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Thanks for your thoughtful write Bob...I think it explains You, as we see you, and yes I consider you a rose out there, blooming where you are planted..
Yes, we learn about one another from day to day Good write! Bookmarked!
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