Songbirds,
near seaside, rise
as the snow falls, quietly,
against ivory skin and waves
of ash.
A contest entry
- whiter words by Nicolette.
1500 points, ended November 20, 2008, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent...
This piece was reminiscent of nature's lure. Then the slow, subtle fall of snow to the earth's busy floor. Great imagery with this piece. Bravo.
AsIThink...
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I live at the sea so I could "feel and see" this poem. Lovely images here and such clever use of imagery too - the allusion of snow and ash - very well done.
I liked this one... thank you for this entry.
~ Nicolette
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Gorgeous! Now I'm shivering, too.
You'd think goose down would stop goosebumps!
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this reminds me of Virginia my beautiful home. It makes me want to wander into these woods
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Permission is granted.
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading.
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Beautiful imagery! Just lovely. I love these lines the most "as the snow falls, quietly,
against ivory skin and waves
of ash."
Wow. Sigh! Ivory skin and waves of ash. With your permission, and complete credits to you! I want to host like one of my quickie contests with those words as the prompt! That's how much I love those few words!
You are incredible! I am so glad I stopped by!
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Very beautiful !!
Love the RISE of the songbirds, and the FALL of the snow.
Adds to the motion of the waves...very clever.
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Thank you for your kind words.
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Oh wow. Excellent imagery, and such beautiful words to describe the moment. Good luck in the contest! A great write!
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I love the flow of this poem...who needs rhyme with perfectly produced alliteration. The imagery within this poem was also very powerful. I really enjoyed reading this.
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Excellent; for something so short you have captured an image that is breathtaking and alluring.
Thank you for sharing your words ~
Ashley A. Wolfe
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very descriptive...a lovely piece
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this is beautiful, excellent imagery...i totally see the sea when it's silver grey, a white sky, the birds, the trees fading into winter...
a lovely scene you paint here with words, i love it=)
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Thank you very much. The form is new to me, but I really enjoyed it.
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Very lovely scenery unfolds in this poetic verse.
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