People judge me by how I look
But people say the cover doesn't make the book
People treat me like I'm dumb
try to weigh me down under a heavy thumb
People tell me what I should do
But being controlled just leaves me blue
People never get to know the real me
Yet all the time they judge thee
People hurt me every single day
by how they act and what they say
People always think that they know best
These people upset me if you haven't yet guessed
Only one person got to know the real me and for that I'm truely glad
But now because of all the others I treat this one person so bad
A contest entry
- Im Here If You Need Someone That Cares by storiesuntold.
925 points, ended November 28, 2008, 28 entries
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Great poem, love the rhyme scheme and i fully agree with all of it... People can be ridiculous, and they can act superior for no reason at all... The only thing one can truly do is live as they feel and ignore what people may say.
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oh wow this is really sad, i can tell that is is deeply personal as i read it, and i want to say something uplifting but it would come out as trite so best of luck in the contest, this was a great read for me
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Sometimes people should mind their own business
A very good poem, and so true as people are like that, telling you how to behave, dress, act...just to please their little minds. Well everyone has a mind, to be used for the good of all, and not to put other people down for their own inconsiderate purpose. Well done and if I may, Another word you could use in place of second "me", a word no longer used in general but would fit your poem. The word "Thee" so line reads like this. "Yet all the time they judge thee" and so you don't have "me" twice. Just a suggest, that word popped into my head as I was reading your poem, anyway it's a well written poem still, so leaving as is won't diminish the brilliance of this poem.
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I hear you honey
Tell me something when the people say what they do in your heart you know its not true right well in knowing this why would you feel badly for peoplewill be people and none of us can ever makes all people happy or agree with us . Be yourself honey and you know in your heart the love you have within and if you have one that does understand and is a friend why would you treat them as the others treat you lets think about this . Often we hate others for what they do but in the same way we do this too . Be yourself but dont let what others say and do make you like them by being bad to the ones close to you . Find those you want in your life and be the best of friends as you can be to them . Let not the outside world sway your feelings one way or another and live honey dont sit around and feel bad or pout about things you know arent true be the best you can be and be kind to people and know we are each unique in our own ways so life can be good for us all
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