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weeks and weeks of bathing in p*ss are what have lead to this

When I woke up today I didn't clean my teeth.
's no point- I'm getting used to the rank taste of life.
Starting to accept it, even.
pink mouth, white teeth, now brown from cavities and decay,

laissez-faire, yeah- that's what I'll be.
Yeah, buy some coke- can of cancer, instant refreshment
though temporary
I s'pose everything is.

I have lost faith in improvement through criticism
being constantly aware
Well, I can see they don't care,
politicians in their lavishly funrnished buildings
while so many
hundreds, thousands
coughing, heaving, struggling
defecate,
fornicate.
Skin an amalgam of scars sealed with cigarette tar
gleaming with grease from bacon and bad hygeiene.
houses brown monochrome.
In everything-
wall colour,
Resident moods
scuzz on the knifes, forks and spoons.
People smile, courageously.
It all sickens me;
What it is
and why it is.
Practice what i preach?
That I do.
Part of what I am I wish I could discharge,
I'd still not be free, but I'd be  removed.

 

Removed from all the brown genericity
of this gritty, brown city, writhing, pleasurably in
a bath of fresh, warm piss,

in self celebration

this very human hedonist is happy again.
and again the night after that,
because he's wise. that's one of the finest faculties of this noble species, you see- the ability to learn.
and this ones's learnt that

nothing

ever

changes.
 

Author notes

I know genericity is not a word. It's one I invented to fit the purpose in this poem.

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  • Nice job. FInalist


    • Mr Id
      May 12
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      Wow!

      That's very flattering, especially out of so many entries- thank you! XXX


  • blondone
    March 1

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    Okay this one is hard for me I really don't feel the state of depression that is the prompt thanks for entering the contest is closed and I will leave it that way


  • AddictiveTRUTH
    January 30

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    First let me say that...

    I read your notes and admire the fact that you were'nt afraid to try something new (inventing your new word) I really admire that, now the rest, I truly enjoyed this. It was REAL and that is what I am looking for.
    Good luck

    -Ephiphany


    • Mr Id
      January 30
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      GREAT!

      I must say I am very pleased- I wasn't sure if this was the type of thing you expected/ were looking for.

      Thanks!


  • nobodys-girl
    December 29, 2008

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    this is awesome! so dark and depressing! i love it. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!


    • Mr Id
      December 29, 2008
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      LOL- it is unusual indeed to be applauded for writing a depressing poem, but thanks! I guess I was writing to a niche readership with this one!

      X


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    genericity, it's nice that you invented it...and that's cool, you're not afraid to try something different, mazing writers invent new words, I wish i could too.

    you have a lot of interesting thoughts and details over here.


    • Mr Id
      November 16, 2008
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      I wouldn't call myself an amazing writer, but I hope to get a little better every day. For me, doing things that I feel others tend not to do so much isnthe most effective method of achievement.

      Thanks for stoppin by, darlin!


  • cfawarman
    November 15, 2008
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    Whoa! Bad day, huh? Apparently this IS Sparta. I do like "genericity" though


    • Mr Id
      November 15, 2008
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      Sparta? :S Please elaborate.

      Glad you like my little neoligism there, though.

      Thanks for stopping by!

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