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delusions in A-minor

 

 

 

 

 

new city, old country-
 
unfamiliar mortar
covers the sadness beneath her,

 
like Persephone and flowers
goodbye becomes an uneasy
token of death

 

a mask unwilling

 

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she marries her ideals;
descends into the undermind,
the promised womb;
 
takes her second-hand virginity
in lieu of salvation

 

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like every beginning

the smallest sound is soon foreign,

 
but beautiful,
like listening to opera in an language

unknown

 

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a deluded house-

his bones inhabit her,

 

covetous foundations

tremble

 

quiet

 

while brides who cannot wed
knit circles, hip to hip,
 
waiting for her flesh

to settle

 

 

[ for only then can she

know them ]

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • iambickilometer
    August 16

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    this is absolutely stunning.

    I went looking for poetry to do with being transgendered, not expecting much, and to discover your work was such an amazing surprise. I don't think I have any critiques, I'm afraid. Keep up the excellent writing.


  • A. Lee S.
    June 11
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    poignant, protective, pensively provoking...

    poetry!

  • I think you should stop editing ... it's perfect.


  • wbiro gold member
    January 22

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    still editing? Well, some pieces are like that- they require a million edits, while others are nearly done right off the pen... (just a sec, must go reacquaint myself with Persephone)... well, this piece still needs a lot of explaining! The mood is definitely in a minor key... not all to happy with things...


  • Cannonsfire
    November 14, 2008

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    Where are the days when lace was just pretty and brides were the ones you watched through windows, in the parks and everywhere and only saw the sunshine of them...sigh...I remember it; somewhere it happened. C


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    November 14, 2008

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    this is full spot on exposure...
    i am left feeling raw
    sitting in lieu of salvation....
    i stayed there... right there.


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    November 14, 2008
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    very nice work Kate


    al


  • stasis
    November 14, 2008

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    she marries her ideals;
    descends into the undermind,
    the promised womb;

    takes her second-hand virginity
    in lieu of salvation
    "


    I love that part.  It's probably my favorite from the whole piece, however, it's difficult to choose.  The whole thing is absolutely amazing.  Beautiful work you have here.

    ♣ Tegan


  • NurseChilly gold member
    November 14, 2008

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    knitting bones and ruminating life... golly, this aches inside me Kate, i feel the need in this!!!
    gutsy and with grace too..

    you can pull these out like no other


  • iverbthenoun
    November 14, 2008
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    *on


  • iverbthenoun
    November 14, 2008
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    i can't comment this.

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