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Pale Beauty

 


white palms,
      finger moonlight

a flower …
                  upon the pond
graceful
                she ripples my
                                        …surface…
                                     
                                a  _Swan_




Author notes

my traditional cinquain poems

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Nicolette gold member
    November 20, 2008
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    please enter your poem here:

    http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2427902


  • Nicolette gold member
    November 18, 2008
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    This is the first entry in this contest thus far that showed us how a cinquain can be presented differently...so well done to you, Mal (but of course...)!

    Very lovely poetry and such a great turn/twist in the 4th line - as it should be. A graceful and elegant write! Thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    "she ripples my surface...a swan" Lovely words and imagery. I love this piece


  • Dalaney gold member
    November 15, 2008
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    sigh. you just tug at my heart
    each and every time, Mally. Lane


    • Malabu
      November 15, 2008
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      you have such a big heart to tug at...
      i'll just keep tugging
      till you melt

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