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Lost (revised)

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” I want you to yearn for me long,
long after I have forgotten you. “


That is the point I suspect,
of unrequited love.
That delicious pain that comes
from trumping an old flame.


When the harbinger of despair is reached.
For too much pain, too much grief,
is risked to play the game.

Know we then, there is solace in retreat.


Closing our selves off.
Afraid that open door
will lead only to that
which has passed before.

You dared to flay me open.
My soul now bent and bruised.
Led me to your bed,  you lied.
The velvet voice  still echos in my head.

And taken at your word.
I freely gave what you requested.
Having won, you fled. Made fast your retreat.
Casting aside this husk left on the sheet.

Now I am poor of heart,
saddened and ill taken.
I did not ask that you call forth,

that part of me that slumbered.


Summoned now like a spoiled child,
I sulk and wander in my mind.
Your whispered words keep me awake
passion roused, no words can slake


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Draig-Aine lost the deadening of the soul when left in hiding awakening to life and all of it's
variety. pain passion hope joy sadness re birth picture photobucket longing
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  • tibsy25
    July 7

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    moving

    This is a situation i think we have all found ourselves, beautifully worded
    thanks for sharing
    T


    • Draig aine gold member
      July 7
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      oh my oh my oh my

      a very old write, hm thanks I needed to look at this one again


  • Dark Otter
    November 14, 2008
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    A interesting view on loss!

    from the viewpoint of a jilted lover.

    • Draig aine gold member
      November 14, 2008
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      hmm yes

      love is a learning process no? at least for me it was, thankyou


  • penman gold member
    November 14, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very creative and so well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.

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