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blizzard

blinded
in diamond dew
of bitter crystal barbs
revenge, in quietus, consumed
white out

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first try at this form

A contest entry

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  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    November 22, 2008

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    This is wonderful...

    Again so much expression & emotional depth in so few words...
    And so much darkness scribed in something so white...
    Well penned, well versed, well done!!!


  • Nicolette gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    This really is a "white cinquain" and you've taken the concept of a blizzard much futher than just cold and snow.

    You've done really well for a first try - i'm impressed - well done! Thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Entwining Beauty
    November 18, 2008

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    Beautiful usage of words in your poem. Reads so beautifully.
    Good luck


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    "diamond dew" beautiful alliteration and so gentle. Lovely
    good luck to you


  • Mozaic
    November 15, 2008
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    Talk about...

    deep! This piece envelops the very dimensional being of white...Great imagery


  • Draig aine gold member
    November 14, 2008
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    yeah

    lovley

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