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Juliet and Isabelle

Her window's open nomore,

I stand here watching from the ground.

I suppose her father found out,

and now our loves been bound.

Find in mine eyes,

The truth and no more lies.

I loved her more than death or life,

And now our dreams are clouded by strife.

I'll run against the storm,

And push through the norm.

I must go through the monsoon,

To the ends of the world.

I want to see her,

I want her to be here.

Our love will be lifted above her head,

And a kiss we will then share.

Kinda short oh well

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  • Xraided
    November 26, 2008

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    I LIKE IT!its short but sweet and simple. very few authors can put a lot of emotion into something and still have the peice be short. amazing write and good work. i love it.


  • the masked one
    November 24, 2008
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    This isnt bad at all. I like this, its simple and short but good. Well done