I'm looking up the rabbit hole.
My family is hibernating.
Heart is beating out of control,
I've got eight bunnies. I love mating!
Slowly, cautiously, I hop out.
Perk up my ears and look around.
Turn my head and look all about.
Listen silently for a sound.
Something stirring inside my soul.
Watching for predators, beware!
I have to find food. That's my goal.
My soft flesh, they wish to ensnare.
Digging deep to find the grass and leaves.
Braving through the cold, wind, and snow.
Just to find what my family needs,
Put them in my mouth, hop below.
Place the food at my family's feet.
Patiently waiting for the spring.
They will then have plenty to eat.
Protecting them from anything,
It's dark, warm, and safe in my hole.
Through the winter I'll protect them.
Living on the tiny wooded knoll.
Watching the hole into our den,
Everything is in my control.
I'm looking up the rabbit hole.
Author notes
Well, this is it! I pictured a rabbit doing what a rabbit does and what I think a rabbit would be thinking. I love rabbits.
A contest entry
- PIF Lucky Dip by catalyst..
650 points, ended December 1, 2008, 19 entries
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Beautiful.
OMG. I love you. This is so beautiful. I don't deserve you. But I love you. I wish I could deserve you. I do love you Ryan. I read your poem: Looking Up The Rabbit Hole.
It was so beautiful. I love you.
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Yes, i love rabbits to. Come to think of it, i love all animals. This was quite a humourous piece that showed us the life of a rabbit from the rabbits point of view. Very well rhymed and the flow was just spot on. As the rabbit spoke, i could feel the urgent need to get things done so he could rejoin the family in their cozy little hole. He seems like a very tender guy, only eight bunnies...never mind, he's got plenty of time, God bless him. Thank you for the marvelous read which i enjoyed and got a great chuckle from.
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very nice, i liked it, the rhyme wa sexcellent, the first stanza made me laugh with the love to mate.
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I really love your take on the prompt
I was expecting some backwards alice story but I love your you took this from the view of a rabbit. The rhyming was flawless and it had a very cheerful air about it that forces one to smile
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awesome write ryan. I thought that this poem was cute. I too love rabbits. Great poem!
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How many of us feel like this when we're about to enter a contest or show our poetry to the world? This is like every poet's brief prayer. The title also speaks of a fresh start... what's at the end of the rabbit hole? It would be interesting to find out where it takes you. At first I thought it was an Alice in Wonderland reference!
This could actually be taken on so many levels.. Its short, simple, yet completely mind wrenching! (in a good way.. it's made me think!)
Keep writing, you are an amazing one!
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Did you mean hole?
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Looking up the rabbit hole
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