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Immersed Deep

Stumble,fumble sweet and delirious,
he was far and aloof,
till we fell together in this,
heavenly accident,
physically, mint breath mine,
met his Reynolded one,
which was just fine,
his masculine frame,
pressed mine delicate one almost lame,
it was not just bodily,
but he immersed in mine,
soul just quite deep and fine.

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but he immersed in mine,
soul just quite deep and fine.

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  • delightfulmess silver member
    November 21, 2008

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    I love the flow. Sorta fun and flirty with
    a edge to it.
    Well done and thank you for entering my contest.


    Delila


  • sunoir
    November 16, 2008

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    nice
    I love the line "stumble, fumble sweet and delirious" in conjunction with the last two lines. To me it portrays the fresh innocence of discovery.


  • trekkergirl
    November 14, 2008

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    hey I like the way this one rhymed. It was very deep and had a lot of emotion into it. You used very words to really get your point across great job. thanks for sharing this with us.