i hate this f***ing poem
because nothing could be said or done...
nothing will fix this home
i wonder what they would think if i was gone
if one nite they lay down in their pretty little bed
they wake up...and im gone
for all they know i could be dead
would it even dawn on them what they have lost?
no...probubly not
mom is worried about the price of her next fix
but gotta make sure everyone is smiling for our family pics
dads determined to win a fight that has been fought
because he wants to win something he has already got
jacob wants to be a dad
better than the one he feels he never truely had
isaac looks so sad
he is slowly losing that smile
the one that would make the pain not hurt so bad
the one that would make the tears subside
all those tears do now is hide
he is losing his innocense
with every scream, slammed door, and familyless family dinner
his hope runs thinner
he is starting to see the truth, and all the pain that lingers
now he has marks all along his fingers
i want to save them all
but i cannot save them if they want to fall
now all i can do is hit that pretty white wall
in that pretty little house
that looks like it would hold a happy little family
...when it really cages them
I HATE THAT F***ING PRETTY WHITE WALL
I HATE THAT F***ING PRETTY LITTLE HOUSE
and that "happy little family" has created f***ing WWIII
but no one will ever see what i see
i am the glue thats trying to keep a brick house from breaking
and all it has done is left me beaten down, bruised, and aching
i blink my eyes two times quick
then i feel sick because i realize that i have to deal with this s***
so for now i have to deal...
i deal with the fighting
i deal with the pain
i deal with all the names used in vain
i deal with all the threats
i live with all my debts
they say i owe my life to them
but they dont know that i would surely give it away
they say i cause their pain
but they dont know they're the reason i am who i am today
they say they want their daughter back
but they dont know they're the ones who laid her to rest
i know im not the best
but knowing i cant fix my broken home leaces a pain in my chest
so like i said before i started, but now im done
i hate this f***ing poem
because nothing could ever be said or done...
nothing will fix this home
What did you think
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this says it all.. all the emotion shows through it perfectly.. its amazing!
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"i deal with the fighting
i deal with the pain"
so true...
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I love it!!! well written,keep it up
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This poem was...interesting. It did have a few spelling errors in it which are distracting, no matter how few. But I have LOADS of bad spelling in my poems so I think you're okay on that one.
"dads determined to win a fight that has been fought
because he wants to win something he has already got
jacob wants to be a dad
better than the one he feels he never truely had"
Was amazing. Best stanza. Keep writing things like that. That flowed and fit well and rythmed perfectly. There were other bits where it seemed like you were trying to hard to rythme, but that was the best. Ulimately I would say: this poem could use some work, but it was a very good write.
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sooo soo sad
i really like this but it is so sad. How could someone live a life like this?? you should talk to OPRAH!!! no offense!!!!! but that is horrible i would have knocked someone the uck out!!!!!
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wow.amazing
..so much emotion..
this is great!
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I know how you feel, I think there are a lot who can relate, I feel your pain
This is so sad, such raw emotion. Great write, I hope things get better,
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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=D
I like this poem. Keep up with the good work!!!
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Oh honey it should not be like that
If you watch TV Please call that number on the Dr Phill show and tell them your story and how your home has become a battlefireld for you .They will get a way to bring you up there and your parents and will help them become free of those drugs they will help the whle family but you must try . I can feel your pain .But honey never strike out on your own for the world beyong those walls if you are a teenager are fiklled with the same pain . Find a relative you can feel safe with and please dont just leave without the knowing you are going to have a place to go to be safe .
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<333
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great poem
u dont like ur home then
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yeh...
i ges u culd say tht...
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thanks for the comment <3
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Wow. I can really feel the anger and hate. This is so full of emotion. I like it alot. A whole lot. Man...This is great. Keep writing!
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thank you very much <3
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