Molecules of time
propelled by endless momentum
bouncing off the walls
of skin casually settled around my soul
my grasp on elasticity is futile
presenting my jaded sense of seconds passed
as clearly as a dictated mirror
days tick by, and the instance hasn't changed
I define oblivious with a new all time low
shaming my bruised defenses
for their lack of agelessness
compounding life and death
as an element of standstill greets a heartbeat
I've become an original solution, one all my own
contradiction of science, I'm breaking all the rules
pieces of generic glass are tracing the beat
of chaos, and I've only to follow the lines
Author notes
Let's see...
Not all that much to say about this one.
It doesn't feel finished but I think for now I'll leave it where it is.
I apologize for only having capitalized one word in the whole poem, and honestly I'm not sure why I did. For some reason, it seems that "Molecules" just has to be capitalized, or it doesn't feel write, if it makes any of you grammar nazis feel better about it. (May have something to do with the word Molecules inspiring me to write this.. I'm pretty sure my physical science course is going to my head)
- Allura
Please tell me what you think
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This was lovely, two thumbs way, way up.
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Outer tries to seep into inner as inner seeks to escape to outer.
Even in chaos there is peace, for each particle knows it's place, it limits
and though try as it might it can never go further than the limits of its
imagination...
Eddy
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Thanks for the read. xD
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Hiya,
Seems its been a long time since i've been here and had a good chat with you...
I will be returning soon... so watch this space.... LMAO..
Down to the good stuff....
'my grasp on elasticity is futile'
'shaming my bruised defenses for their lack of agelessness'
'compounding life and death'
'contradiction of science, I'm breaking all the rules'
My fave sections...
I think this is utterly finished... and a damn good write..
and I agree it has a kind of sexual overtone to it..lol
Keep 'em coming..
Jeffro
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Thanks.
I think I'm going to come back as well.
I've missed this place- and I've missed you. O_~
<3
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I think your course is getting to your head as you metnioned science in the last stanza. You're letting education overcome your thoughts :0 whhhaaaaaaaaaaaat?! why would you ever do such a thing?
From the first stanza, I thought this piece was going to be about sex written in a strange way. As I read more, I still thought it was about sex. Now that I'm at the end, I still think it's about sex.
If it is written about sex, I really like it, it's different. It's eccentric and unconventional and I really adore it.
If not... I feel like a jackass.
None the less though, I like this piece and to me, it feels finished. But maybe it doesn't to you because you feel like you have more to say, if that be the case, I say you add more and if you do let me know because I'd like to read it!
&hearts
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I know dude, stupid school is getting to me. Like my physical science book is a total wordbank for this poem, "compound," "element," "science," "molecules." hahaha. It's gay as shit.
Welllllll, It's not about sex.
But I like that interpretation perhaps better than the real one, so let's just tell everyone it's about sex. Lol.
I'm glad you think it feels finished because I've not come up with anything else for it. When I wrote it I thought I had more to say, but now it does feel done. xD
Loves.<3
- Allura
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