Locked away inside this room
holding you close
knowing your mine
until it is her I see
She is back in action
and trying to steal you away from me!
This room is only big enough for two
and she is slowly taking our air
Im panicing and searching frantically
trying to find an exit signs red glare
No doors
No windows
No way out!
She is moving in closer
making her move
and pushing me about
After all that I put in it
and all I ever saw
its slowly ending
right in front of my own eyes
and burning to the floor
It was just yesterday
I fell so hard for you
for the third time around
but she is back in my space
as I am trying to just get out
I thought we would have a future
I thought we would have some kids
you were so sweet and innocent
and she was the devil wearing a grin
After everything we have been through together
if I leave now I know it will be hard
I will probably never be able to
love someone as much as I did
The exit sign comes into view
its red glare showing me there is a way
I look at you and see her kiss you
and the tears just stream down my face
Why?
I don't want to leave now
I just want her to go
we could be okay
lets just drop this and move on.
No!
I can do this
I deserve better than this
the devil is now bleeding red makeup
upon my angels soft pale lips
I can't!
I can't do this
Life is just going to be hard
she was the one and only thing
the only thing that warmed my heart.
Yes!
I must leave now
It is only best I do
I let go of everything
and run towards the exit sign in view
I stop in mid sprint
and look at you one time
you plead for me to stay
with eyes filled with tears
and a heart left in pieces
I tell you its goodbye from here.
I push through the exit doors
gasping for the air of my own
hurt and heart broken
I leave the panic room alone.
In a list
A contest entry
- Exit Strategy by vampedvixen.
1200 points, ended November 27, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please give me your honest opinion on what you truly think of this piece I will return the favor...*muah* (redhanded)
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This is such a great write. I know that you were worried that manda'd come and steal me away, but she didnt. I'm still here & she is long gone. I love you alone baby gurl
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Thank you so much for entering my contest. I haven't had a chance to reply to any of the poems until now. I love the way you capture so much in this poem that it become a story, illustrating all the twists and turns your relationship with this person took. Bravo on this wonderful job!
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Not the panic room again
You didn't write this after watching "Panic Room", aka Jodie Foster did you?, lol!!! Well whatever your muse, this poem flows well and is written wih a lot of emotion thrown in.
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thanks for commenting my piece it is greatly appreciated...LOL and no not the panic room the movie I have never even saw it lol...but thanks again and best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
andi
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Great poem....well written and expressed...feel the emotion in this one...nicely done
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thank you very much for your comment I appreciate it !
and your quite welcome for yours as well...best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
andi
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Roses are red,
selling violets won't make you rich.
Now I don't advocate violence,
but sometimes you gotta cut a bitch. -
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ahahaha....true that. LMAO.
thanks for ur comment. it was hillarious.
andi.
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beautiful and forlorn
I love the lix emotions threaded with pure desperation. Wanting someone back, but also knowing they are not good for you. Brings back my memories.... I need a tissue now....
RF
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aw thank you very much for your comment
I appreciate it.
andi
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strong from start to finish, the kind of poem that just makes you reflect, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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thanks for your comment.
I appreciate it.
andi.
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