The masses value their ignorance as much as their hypocrisy
Each of which allows them to reject that very notion
It is a cyclical, paradoxical world
Where logic and reason are the greatest illusions
There is no other way,
So give up and let your brain wash away
Drown in the midst of beautiful lies
And blink at society as we know it's demise
Think not as your rights are diminished
It is a cyclical, paradoxical world
Where logic and reason are the greatest illusions
Whichever direction the bird may fly,
To see it you must first look up at the sky
The greatest pleasures are the greatest distractions,
And these are what we truly seek
So drown in the midst of beautiful lies
As the powerful continue treading over the weak
A contest entry
- Dark writing (my first ever contest!!!) by RazorbladeKiss14.
715 points, ended September 15, 84 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
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Very very good! great writing! Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest!
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the second to the last, the two line stanza, was just great, i mean fucking sneakily brilliant. if that doesn't sum up ignorance, and i wonder how many people caught that. pretty smart and sly as well
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Very Good
You can't get anymore contemporary than this. It certainly applies to our current social and political situation. People seem to embrace propaganda to support their positions discarding facts that don't work for them. Great Job!
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couldn't help but read a poem plugged as "its the shit"
true enough summary - loved the poem, first stanza really draws the reader in, great use of high order lexis - big words aint used enough these days and they really help to make the point here
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Thoughts should be written, what other way.
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You use powerful, and dangerous, words
Which is a great way to keep people hooked. I couldn't stop readin after you used the word "hypocrisy". Powerful thoughts usually come from powerful people. Keep up the poetry. -
I most like the first two lines of the last stanza. They are very poignant. I would change the "these" in the fourth line of the last stanza to a "those" since they were previously referenced.
On the basis of message I would say that while ignorance itself is a part of life, and these conclusions aren't necessarily false, it is a part of being human, a part of this world we find ourselves in. No one in this world will ever be perfect in any way that everyone can agree upon, perfection itself is a human invention. The world could be better, and frustration is normal. Do not give up hope though, you can make a change for the better, even if it is just for one other person. All we can do is what we can do. Keep writing
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That's exactly what the poem says, that ignorance "is a part of being human". But it is the cycle that our natural ignorance leads us in that is described, and not out of frustration. It is a cycle we all our a part of. I won't explain why I think that, because it would take a while, and I am lazy.
This is not a cry for perfection or a sigh for human ignorance, but simply an observation, a series of thoughts. And the "these" is fine as it is.
Thanks for the comment.
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wow. this deserves a hell of a lot more reads.
i had to really stop and think about the first two lines for a minute, but after that everything just seemed to flow together, and with the slight bit of repetition that you used, this was a very powerful read. it makes me think twice about the way i live my life. the only criticism i have is that a few of the lines have too many syllables making this a little bit hard to spit out.
otherwise, amazing.
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I can't believe noone has commented on this. This stirs up a number of issues and I like controversy. I do not think you need to revise it. It is good as it is. Very nice, it makes the reader think about issues: elites, the masses and how messed up the world really is. You have earned my applause. Keep it up.
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