The ceiling
flies away
from the floor
In a room without a door
a room without you
You float away too
sinking into Nothing
finding Something.
This is no longer a dream,
just the taste of cold air.
After everything forgets its self
I forget my self,
sinking into nothing
Swollowing the seeds of
silence
they sprout and entangle my words
the words that float
upwards
into your eyes
Like one hello
with
two goodbyes.
Author notes
it's not good...but I don't completely care...it felt good to at least let something out..my state of mind is absolute insanity.
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Dang - your words have a way of not simply touching me, but gripping me! And I Know I'm not the only one. As to your author notes, I think all writers, poets especially have felt (and probably been) themselves in the same state.
You continue to astound.....
ya All~Ways,
~ Jan ~
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one hello with two goodbyes.. that line is very nice. you seem to have a little Syd Barret in you and that is always a good thing.
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I've missed your work.
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i miss you. what a beautiful poem to come back to.
how's life treating you, darlin? love's letting you down?
ahh, yes, the usual. i will write you something one day, let you in on your two goodbyes. -
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thank you
I was actually reading a poem of yours to a friend like 2 days ago
ha
strikes me as strange that I'd get on here and it just so happens there is a comment from you
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mmm... i love
"a room without you
You float away too"
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In a room without a door
a room without you
there is no way to escape
hello friend
goodbye
goodbye
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you know..you're awefully amazing..
thank you
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If love is nothing it is a good thing you are sinking into it.
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I guess so...
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It's a shame that an author can't view his subject without his own eyes. Then, you would be able to stand back and realize how amazing your words come together.
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I'd love that for just one day..to not be myself and see myself..
[deepsighmoment]
thank you betty 
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This is very good. I think it's one of the best poems I've read today (even though it's only 5am) Haha, I like how you pick up on the last thought and carry on. It's wonderful! Keep writting, you're very good at it.
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well thank you
haha
I on the other hand absolutely can't stand it...it's super choppy and unorganized..
buuut..it still felt good to write...
I don't know..it's odd...
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Haha no problem...Well we are our hardest critict. Lol
I still like it alot..you'll never change my mind never!!!
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haha
it's not weird..
and I think I hate it because that gives me more room to like it...if that makes any sense at all to you... -
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Yeah...that makes perfect sense.
I dunno....Ugh Im bored but yes.
It does make sense
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haha
go swing at a park..
that's fun..do it by yourself though..and think and think and think...thinking is fun to me.......
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