Innocence Ours
From our birth
Safely guarded
As our worth
I give my all to you
A contest entry
- Delightful Prompt Contest. by delightfulmess.
700 points, ended November 25, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 5 Lines or Less...ends in 1 hour!! Give me Your Best!! by Timeless Wisdom.
525 points, ended November 15, 2008, 18 entries
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What did you think
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Powerful in it's brevity..a lot said in so few lines...Again, I am in awe of your talent.
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I don't do brief that much. I'm glad how this one turned out. Thanks.
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Wonderful brevity that speaks volumes
Well done and thank you for entering my contest.
Delila -
Thats real meaning in these world so few another good write
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lovley
c
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I like it. It made me think. This is deep. Funny how a few words can say a whole lot. Good Write.
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In short form it says it all. I like the space between "As our worth" and "I give my all to you" Its like a leap from childhood innocence
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Thank you.
I had not thought of it that way. Interesting picture you have. Are you opening your soul to us?
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nawww
its really gud
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Aww....I have felt this way so many times before towards that significant other..unfortunately they took what I gave them and put it in the blender...wonderfully written. Thanks for your entry.
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Speaks volumes in a few carefully chosen lines. Lovely write.
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A lovely sweet emotional write. You've crafted the words so perfectly to describe the thing that is 'priced above rubies' our innocence. Wonderful!
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A lot said in only a few lines.The pulse of life is much more than just losing innocence thru sex. Good luck in the contest!
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Short, sweet and sincere. Well written.
Buddy
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