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cull what is worse,
loose left; broken-
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find in them, all that is good.
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The sun-beats-upon-them,
~ rough-winds cut through- ~
~~~ them ... heavy-rains, ~~~
~ wash-away-at-their-soul. ~
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~~ I long for a time, days- ~
when they-were bountiful,
~ this-season-has-brought to
~~~~~ me sour-fields. ~~~~~~
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~~~~~ While peaceful, honest, ~~~~~
~~~~ resting quietly, I know genuine- ~~~~
~ innocence-remains willing, lying open full ~
~~~~ and aware thriving in-her-infancy. ~~~~~~
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Restore-my-faith in-miracles, secure me ... allow
~ for me this gentle repose; cover her-in-winters-
~~~ cloak ... provide for her; a true recovery;- ~~~
~~~~~~ cultivate-her-with-love yes embrace- ~~~~~~~
~~~~~~~~~ her in-the-spring; sew me ... a ~~~~~~~~~~
~~~~~~~~ fertile field;- sun warm it, rains, ~~~~~~~~~
~~~~~~ return ... nurture it so-honest-winds ~~~~~~
~~~~~~~~~ may scatter forth new seed; ~~~~~~~~~~
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~~~~~~~ and others, may come again; ... ~~~~~~~
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~~~~~~~~~~~~ pure-and-sweet; ~~~~~~~~~~~
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~~~~ and-blossom-for all the world- ~~~~~
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Author notes
dance with words
This was a poem very personal to me ... Starting over is the most difficult part of overcoming depression, so I prayed for a new beginning so I might become whole, and full again.
With careful editing this poem buds of new life in the shape of a spring blossom.
zanny
A contest entry
- push my buttons by the chase.
900 points, ended November 19, 2008, 11 entries
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nice job with the concrete poetry. I never realized one could use dashes and such to create the form. Nice job.
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wow. simply, wow! the meaning was absolutely divine, and i love how you shaped the poem itself... your imagery was fantastic and well described, every line made a picture and stirred my heart just a bit... a wonderful message and wonderfully written!
i am glad to see my contest affected you so personally, and i even more so to see the product of it
thanks for entering, and good luck in the competition!
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Such deep meaning in every line.
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I asked not to have poems like this in my contest
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I have fought depression and anixety most of my life, hopefully I have a handle on it now. You can make it too. I believe in you and most importantly, God believes in you!!!
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Thank you for your words. I try to take credit in even the smallest steps and accomplishments. I was destroyed when my disease had taken from me all that was familiar, health, home, my children, ultimately my sanity, all the points at which I measured the value of my life. The mile markers of my life seem to have been swept away. A clean start is a gift that God has given to me by which I can move forward. I am thankful and live by the Psalm 139 as my guide and light.
God Bless,
Zanny
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i like this, it looks like a flower, it's amazazing. Good luck.
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Beautiful
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Thank you !!!!
God Bless,
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Thank you, a friend of mine who is so very talented took my words and and formed it for me... the poem came first... and God took over.....
God Bless,
Zanny
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Great poem
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Thank you,
God Bless,
Zanny
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Thank you for your entry good luck in the contest
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YVW
God Bless,
Zanny
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because of my OCD it is very hard for me to read dirty-pretty style poetry, but i'm glad that i forced myself to push past that and read this poem, because it is very powerful, and real, best of luck in the contest
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Thank you i am very glad that I touched you.
God Bless,
Zanny
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Excellent!!
great poem. I could feel everything in it. It must have taken a while to do the poem like that but it looks good...I can somewhat relate to the poem in some perspectives but not all of it. good job...good luck in the contest
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Moments to create .... years in the making. Or is that moments to make years to create? lol
Thank you,
God Bless
Zanny
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Great piece! presented well and i love the metaphors and imagery used in it. good luck
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Thank you,
God Bless,
Zanny
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well done
This is a good poem. The contex and the word choice are very good. The punctuation, however, is puzzling. The seemingly indescriminate use of hyphens is offputting. And where there should be a hyphen, "sun warm", there is none. Suggest you remove the comma "left, broken", and "laying" should be "lying".
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Thank you for the suggestions.
God Bless,
Zanny
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