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unfinished story of a boy and a girl

I walk on a tenuous rope, trying to come back home


Bashed by vitriolic words,
he tried to wheedle me
off the rope; and I fell…

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never could finish this


grr

but i hope that you like
<3

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  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 17, 2008

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    Actually looks pretty complete to me. Poems don't have to be long to be good. Sometimes more is just more, not necessarily better.
    this is good.

    Buddy


  • McRae by nature
    November 16, 2008

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    Like it? I actually loved this little piece. In its few words, it still seems to tell the whole story, the frustration, the weaknesses. This was great and I do not even know if it needs finishing. I think it stands alone very strongly. Thank you.

    Carrie

  • NoMoreAThought
    November 16, 2008

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    I like it but I don't get it.

    You too smart....


    Bloop



  • hks
    November 14, 2008
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    i like this


  • Venugopal gold member
    November 13, 2008

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    Is it a story, you could never finish. I hope real story ends well

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