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[ a little less than empty ]

I feel a little less than empty today
my existance filling
the negative space
in an alternate universe.

It's no use to me now
lacking empathy, no better
than less than nothing
in this End.

Maybe not and End, but
temporary exhaustion pending
a sad state
in an ill mind.

No thoughts return to me
but an extended vacation
takes a toll
on the never-ending loneliness.

Boyfriend wanted to "take a break". This resulted.

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  • lady8
    November 13, 2008

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    Nicely done,I really liked the style to this and the words yiu chose to use. Powerful feeling even if it is less than empty.