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Afterburn



You leave me shaking
like a leaf in the Windward Isles -
gaping like a cave mouth 
forever thirsting for the drop
that runneth over the lip of your cup


Tenderly, like the exhalations
of deer on frosty windows

you touch me here
           and here
              
and here
in a moon-bath of fire and awe
and I want to touch back -
the lunar lick screaming
between your shoulder blades,
high inside your thighs -
but every breath
is an ache
a snake-bitten finger,
painted in Biblical colours -
a gliding musical discord


And the only way
we recover is one inside the other
bound like hand-made journals
with the miasma
of fifteen hours sleeping,
crying with the crickets

 

I hear you
through my pores
and the hunger-moon follows us
kissing our skin in the early morning
where we become lavender
and sharp teeth
with the pulse of Jacob
swelling softly on our lips -
swallowing each other
like burnt almonds
sweet

      and bitter
                  and lush




 




Afterburn
İcrisstiena

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Image by Andrew Watton

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  • zt
    September 4

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    Mmmm....yess.... This was delicious. Fabulous images--so sensual that one aches just reading them. I loved these lines:

    "forever thirsting for the drop
    that runneth over the lip of your cup"

    Marvelous..


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    November 22, 2008

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    Very nice imagery here...
    There were so many good lines-

    the lunar lick screaming
    between your shoulder blades,

    I loved the 'lunar lick' -wonderful phrasology!

    And the only way
    we recover is one inside the other

    Loved the way that flowed. Leaving no doubt as to what was happening, without sounding coarse (as so many manage to!)

    I hear you
    through my pores

    Love that too... Hearing through pores- Truly being 'One'


  • Dariha
    November 13, 2008

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    i loved 'hunger-moon' (33). what an amazing word. this is a very sensual poem, rich in emotive and natural imagery, with tones of eroticism that are not so obvious as to make the poem unapproachable. The celestial innuendo (13 and 15) made for an interesting connection between content and form. If you are planning to revise it, i can only suggest that you make it more of what it is. good luck in the contest!