I drew the curtains back to reveal my mistakes
and to seek the envy that dripped from the wispy gray clouds,
yearning to feel it sink into my imperfections and to make this life
turn in my direction of closure, rather than chewing on
tasteless past regrets and swallowing anxiety pills to keep my heart
from bursting from the inside of my chest,
all because of you.
I see your reflection eagerly pacing over my thoughts
every night before I sink underneath the covers to slip
into another worthless and interrupted dream,
only to be fixated on the structure of your face and
the coherence and strength of your broad arms
that left me nearly breathless, even if we were worlds apart.
But I was standing still at the end of your apocalypse, regaining
a consciousness that was born to my name, but used in a matter
of desperation, something you wouldn't understand;
and it wasn't that I expected you to, you know, put two and two
together and comprehend that I was initially just throwing down
ideas that our situation could benefit from,
I was simply bemused when all I ever did was perfect a fake smile
because otherwise, I buried your insensitive happiness
far beneath the surface of the earth, and it killed you,
when you muddled yourself into the crevices of shame;
but that was never my fault,
you chose to pick daisies from a field of roses,
& you wanted to cradle infatuation in your harmful arms,
while tossing important pieces of love on the outskirts
of your unbreakable brick walls, to the point where I shifted
into unreasonable illusions and allowed you to sink into my veins.
[but you never believed in me,]
& as I scream my insecurities in my pillowcase to make sure
my vocal cords aren't shattered, you suddenly became resistible,
and for the first time,
I was short of spitting out second chances;
you might want to make note of this smile that takes up
half of my brightened face, because it's not going anywhere,
& I think you should come to understand,
that I'm nothing short of ready
to let you go.♥
Author notes
Day 1.
Picture #20.
YoureNoGoodForMe
A contest entry
- 7 Days 7 Prompts by stargazer..
750 points, ended January 3, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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'but that was never my fault,
you chose to pick daisies from a field of roses,
& you wanted to cradle infatuation in your harmful arms,
while tossing important pieces of love on the outskirts
of your unbreakable brick walls, to the point where I shifted
into unreasonable illusions and allowed you to sink into my veins.'
O god where should I start. The amazing beginning that drew me in so that I literally held my breath? How I can relate to every word of it? How it put words to emotions I couldn't even name?
Or the ending that made me feel ten times lighter because it has so much hope in it?
you are brilliant, I look forward to attending your book signing(even if I have to wait 5 New York blocks behind all your raving fans)
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hahaha
that just made my day. lol :]
well, i dont think you'll be able to wait in line, considering you'll be signing more books than muwahhh
hahaha. and you'll have psychotic fans in line for yours :]]] lol
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thank you that makes me very happy
though psychotic fans tend to do things such as shoot their idols, causing the deaths of people such as Bruce Lee lol -
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haha whoops
forgot about that
lol
well there will be hot muscular guards guarding you so you dont have to worry about that
fawk, arnold schwarzenegger is gonna guard me at my book signing ! hahaha
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hah I think all I need is a chuck norris.
but arnold can come too lol, even if he can't slam revolving doors.
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"I drew the curtains back to reveal my mistakes
and to seek the envy that dripped from the wispy gray clouds,
yearning to feel it sink into my imperfections and to make this life
turn in my direction of closure, rather than chewing on
tasteless past regrets and swallowing anxiety pills to keep my heart
from bursting from the inside of my chest"Ohkay, WHAT IS WITH YOU AND THESE AHHHMAZINGLY AHCREDIBLE BEGINNINGS?!?! I feel better now. Anywhoz ;]
Awesomeawesomeawesome imagery and metaphors!!! I love "drawing back the curtains" and "chewing on tasteless past regrets" and "swallowing anxiety pills".
"before I sink underneath the covers to slip
into another worthless and interrupted dream"Woww, hoe, you have such an astounding way with words! No lie fly=] I love the general image of slipping into that type of dream...
"you wanted to cradle infatuation in your harmful arms"
Just the use of the word "cradle" in here and "harmful arms" made the line jump out to me. Again -- your imagery is LALALOVE. :]
"[but you never believed in me,]"
Ohh, you definitely just hit the nail on the head right there. You need faith in yourself, the other person, and in your friendship in general to have a decent relationship of any kind with someone.
"& as I scream my insecurities in my pillowcase to make sure
my vocal cords aren't shattered"Do I even need to say imagery and metaphors ? :] Such powerful wordsl ike "scream" and "shattered".
Gahhh, I lovelovelove youuu and your poetry and can I please be your editor fo lyfe?! <3333
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looooooooooooooooove
WOW you really made this poem your b1tc4 
your wording is amazing and the stretches from emotions to metaphors are seamless
only to be fixated on the structure of your face and
the coherence and strength of your broad arms
sometimes its hard to let go when they're hawt
& as I scream my insecurities in my pillowcase to make sure
my vocal cords aren't shattered, you suddenly became resistible,
and I was short of spitting out second chances;
that point when we realize we're wasting our time
this is a A+
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