The joke is me just thinking that I could
be more, oh, than a simple, foolish man.
The dreams I had as hopeful child withstood
the time of plans unworked and fears that ran.
Through days of living sharp on mirrored edge
I bled the silly pain of wisest fool.
What gainful pride did rule in passions pledge
to head the top of class of buffoon school.
I dance, I sing, I joke, I juggle all;
all lies to what I feel, the buffoon dies,
to regal wearing of cap that baroque
a spirit of minstrel child in errant cries.
The hat now sits on mighty head so grand
I know I am the wisest fool, yes, firsthand
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Very nicely done.
"The joke is me just thinking that I could
be more, oh, than a simple, foolish man.
The dreams I had as hopeful child withstood
the time of plans unworked and fears that ran."
This first is my favourite of the stanza's, really enjoyed reading.
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Thoroughly enjoyed the way that this was written, particularly how it was so openly mocking itself - in ways.
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This is penned nicely. I likd this. It made me giggle a bit. And it's true, sometimes when you try to make yourself "Not act a fool" you just end up making an even more fool of yourself. The flow and context was very good and so was the imagrery. I could see someone trying to become not a fool but ended up making themselves "the wisest fool"... Nice write and good luck in the contest.
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I thought I had replied to this, but in the group list of Journey of the Mind, there is not a note of anyone reviewing this very well written pen.
Because I know you would relate, let me just say that I have been practicing laughing at myself in the mirror lately as I admit my mistakes.
Blessed Be~
)O(
DragonBlue
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I think the joke is on each and every one of us, but at least we must be wise enough to realize it. The jester knws himself and his surroundings. Perhaps the joke is really on those who are not jesters, those who cannot laugh at their own follies.
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Standing Ovation
I don't read rhyme from you very often and you did a wonderful job with it. A fool indeed. My hero.
Blessed Be~
)O(
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Bandit Appreciation
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The Poetic Bandits
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The job of a jester is to entertain. I don't think they are as foolish as they are made out to be in literature.
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Enjoyed your Jester's poem. Quite the head apparel these are! Liked the flow, rhythm and rhyme in these lines as well. Good take on the prompt given in the contest. Great ending.
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Bravo
well done again my friend, to laugh a ones self knowing the joke in on others is a feeling of delight. It is wonderful to know you are the wisest fool amongst friends. Again great job, Boog
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This is a poem most everyone can identify with I think. I've always liked jestures because they are so arrogant and theatric, but so clownish and clumsy at the same time (and they usually look pretty good in those tight pants too.... lol )
It's always good to know your the wisest fool in the end isn't it?
What started out as a poem seeming to be about self pity, ended up being a poem about realistic self acceptance.
I appriciate that. And if falls right in line with the jester, does it not???
Wonderful work.
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Thanks for your great comment
on jester's cap. I am the fool in all his glory.
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Poet, this is good. I like your take on the prompt very much. A couple things I want to say: "arr'gance" in line seven and "harl'quin" in line eight seem a little awkward to me. And in line eleven, is "baroque" supposed to be "broke"?
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Hi!
For jester's cap, arrogance and harlequin are contracted to fit the meter (as per Shakespeare). Harlequin and arrogance are the perfect fits for both the meter and the content. Baroque and broke is a subtle play on words as per the jester's play.
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I like what you saw in this picture, very creative write. And of course an excellent Sonnet Some of this I find relatable as I am sure many will. I do love that last line, superbly penned, all the best in the contest
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These lines: I laugh, I jest, I rant, I sing, I joke
all lies to what I feel, the buffoon dies. . .I can relate to. I hide behind a smile most of the time. Great write. Thanks for entering and good luck! -
i loved it. it made me laugh. it fits your teenage state. lol i love the last two lines
The hat now sits on mighty head so grand
I know I am the wisest fool, yes, firsthand
well written my dear friend.
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Thanks Vampire Dragon
I'm happy that you saw this one. It relates closely to my life.
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nice start, is that pic taken from Magic ; the gathering, i forget which edition it has been too many years, too many braincells
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Damn, are you good!
Yes it is, it has just the message I want to send. I am image driven and that jester represents my 'worst fool'. Very observant and yes I also played Magic the Gathering. It consumed me for years.
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