Beside yourself to see what lies beside
Go down the road that goes where you would go
Decide what you are trying to decide
No more important fact for you to know
Inside the truth that you have found inside
Show all of us that you can make a show
I cannot see inside your searching eye
Why can't I seem to find the answer why
Do all the deeds you thought you could not do
Find all the love you thought you could not find
You hid the past that made you into you
Behind the heavy load you left behind
New life with me was all you thought you knew
Mind numbing pain was taken from your mind
Cry loud to warn me not to make you cry
Try hard to see that I can only try
Author notes
A Shadow Ottava Rima
Eight ten syllable lines (eleven syllables if you use a feminine rhyme) rhymed abababcc, the Shadow element borrowed from Amera's shadow sonnets is the use of homophones at each end of each line.
In a list
A contest entry
- Illusionary Poetry by Amera.
2000 points, ended November 14, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me honestly what you think, good or bad.
Comments
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I guess this was a total shoe-in for the gold.
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not being one up on the many different forms of poetry I can not say if it is well written What i can say though is that it is a piece i found a joy to read I had the strangest feeling while reading if of the poem "IF" do not ask me why it was just that feeling one gets
Congratulation on the Gold. Deserved
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Amazing! This is penned in perfect decasyllable, rhyme and meter. It's a perfect take on the prompt because I think the poem its self is ambiguous. Very, very impressive!
Love,
Amera♥
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