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Dollhouse - Critical Error (Complete)

[Drum Solo]

[Verse 1]
When you're all finished playing God
Stop and stare at the shattered figures
Porcelain dolls, so small and fragile
Clothes torn to tatters, riches to rags
Never holding back...

[Chorus]
When you find those figures
Broken, chipped and paralyzed
Look in the mirror, control freak
And you'll have realized
(This world is not your dollhouse)
And when they're left with nothing
Look around you and you'll see
Your world's collapsed around you
And there's nothing you can be
(This world is not your dollhouse)

[Verse 2]
Playing pretend, to prevent the world from knowing
Hiding your lies, your life you've been building
Just play your tea party, play with your poison (Poison)
Feed your family lies, ignoring their cries
And I'll just watch this world fall apart around you
(I'll just watch this world fall apart around you)


[Chorus]
When you find those figures
Broken, chipped and paralyzed
Look in the mirror, control freak
And you'll have realized
(This world is not your dollhouse)
And when they're left with nothing
Look around you and you'll see
Your world's collapsed around you
And there's nothing you can be
(This world is not your dollhouse)

[Bridge]
Bent and broken limbs
This is our revenge
The bruises you inflicted
This...is...our...(REVENGE!)

[Guitar battle]

[Chorus]
When you find those figures
Broken, chipped and paralyzed
Look in the mirror, control freak
And you'll have realized
(This world is not your dollhouse)
And when they're left with nothing
Look around you and you'll see
Your world's collapsed around you
And there's nothing you can be
(This world is not your dollhouse)

(This world is not....your...DOLLHOUSE!)

Author notes

An unfinished version of a song I'm writing for my band, Critical Error. Everything in brackets is meant to be screamed, not sung.
Italicized parts courtesy of Ayin Darktree. Muchas gracias, Cyril.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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Comments

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  • skye01 gold member
    April 26
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    Interesting. What is the music like? Very Powerful.


  • Mie Silvermoon
    January 14

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    If you have a demo or something of this song actually being played,I'd love to hear it...My fellow songwriter.

  • Ayin Darktree
    November 13, 2008

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    Muchas Gracias? Hahaha, I know what it means. XD Well I ish trying to helps you. ^__^

    Yupp yupp.

  • Mr.
    November 13, 2008
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    This will make a good song. It'll be a rock song right?
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