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I surrender

I shouldn’t love you
It’s not good for me
I shouldn’t love you
But you’re the only one I see

My heart shouldn’t pound
When I hear your voice
My heart shouldn’t pound
But it’s not my choice

My body can’t ache
Ache for your touch
My body can’t ache
Be my emotional crutch

My eyes can’t see
What my heart won’t allow
My eyes can’t see
Love blinds me now

I can’t help myself
I want to revel in bliss
I can’t help myself
I need your affectionate kiss

I need you now
More then I will admit
I need you now
I’m willing to submit.

So take my love
Be amorous and tender
So take my love
For I surrender

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  • dustytiger
    November 13, 2008

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    omg i very much love this poem, it's something i can relate to right now, but have not been able to get my words out right, what a fantastic write, just beautiful, best of luck in the contest


  • splinteroflight.
    November 13, 2008

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    Wow :)

    I absolutely adore this!
    It's so emotional, the repetition of the first line in every verse really works!
    The rhyme doesn't sound forced at all&It's sometimes quite hard to get the balance right
    Good luck
    <3<3<3


    • SunnyRain
      November 13, 2008
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      Thanks guys for the positive feedback! it Means so much to me that its liked!