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Ultraviolet Vertigo

This paper doll heart
& porcelain
  face of mine

show years of wear and tear
in vivid c_r_a_c_k_s and r/i/p/s/

I am nostalgic for the days
when I was new
and still well loved.
♥♥♥

But now,
my limbs are ((folded))
onto themselves

and I am

= q u a r a n t i n e d =

to reside in the m.u.s.t.y.
wooden box
obfuscated

                 in the corner of this playroom.

Once glorious jasmine hair
       is now s*n*a*r*l*e*d and

                                              knotted
while kaleidoscopic eyes ECLIPSE
                         the traumas of yesterday
as wanderlust dies

 

 m

   e

      e

        k

          l

            y


of a quiet shadow death.

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Bean Sidhe

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 24

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    Oh wow, this was amazing dirty pretty!
    So many gorgeous images throughout
    I loved this piece!!!

    So very inspiring, and makes me want
    to read it over and over again.

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • xmiasmatik
    February 20

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    w00t, a little dirty pretty, huh? Don't worry, I'm a fan.
    (: Good word choice, EXCELLENT imagery.

    I liked:
    Once glorious jasmine hair
    is now s*n*a*r*l*e*d and
    knotted
    while kaleidoscopic eyes ECLIPSE
    the traumas of yesterday
    as wanderlust dies

    m
    e
    e
    k
    l
    y

    of a quiet shadow death.

    Sweetness. Thanks for the entry.


  • Jonbug gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    Good use

    I like the use of your word structure. The doll herself...it's like she was sitting on top of my monitor. Good description!
    But it was the title that catches the eye. One can make the greatest product ever and miss the mark with the name of the product/title to the poem/book/movie. The title was almost as good as the poem.


  • Zeprina-Jaz
    December 13, 2008

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    I like the use of text to convey your meanings. The title is really catchy, but I'm too stupid to understand its link to the poem! I like your message, though.

  • theshadowedone
    November 16, 2008
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    eesh. deep. thank you.


  • Le Fille Morte
    November 13, 2008
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    This is really great!


  • lunarlunacy
    November 13, 2008

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    well keep messin, cuz that word play is very well executed. such text shannanigans are not always the easiest to execute and not come off as contrived. well done, well done.


  • Death of the Author
    November 13, 2008
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