frozen condensation settles neatly on the sheets
between our bodies
feverish from the war we are waging
when we were young
your touch set me on fire
melting all my fears away
but tonight I feel the frost
A contest entry
- first frost by AJ Morelli.
2700 points, ended December 7, 2008, 28 entries
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sad but familiar
thanks
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sounds of frost bitten words echo in the night...unheard by the ears of a lover dorment beneath a blanket of snow
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love the first line
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omg i can relate. wonderful job writing this one. much love and respect to you
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That last line certainly delivers the punch...it's as frosty as what you decribe.
I like this, good luck
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Thank you =)
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