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It Lies Exposed

I’ll not be laughed at now you see,

For what is there is only me.

I may seem like a joke to some;

Because I’m blond don’t mean I’m dumb.

Decisions aren’t my special thing,

And sometimes I’m not listening.

The funny things you see in me

Are not the joke they seem, you see.

This heart that thinks the best of all,

May set me up for quite a fall.

The landing’s hard for gentle folk,

So hold your laugh, my care’s no joke.

Am I a fool? Perhaps it’s so,

And in the end I’m sure I’ll know

If what befalls a soul like this

Will be like hell . . . or heaven’s bliss.

So once more hold that giggle please,

For ridicule’s a vile disease.

Though not a joke, I seem a fool.

For I live by the golden rule.

To others do not as THEY would,

But treat them as you know you should,

And then the joke will be on those

Whose foolishness now lies exposed.

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Based on the prompt:

I am not a joke, but may be a fool . . .

Written from the the viewpoint of the contest holder who had the thought for this contest. Very cool!

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  • Ellis gold member
    November 19, 2008
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    Excellent, Really First Rate

    The advice in this poem is really useful and valuable.


  • Grey Mouser
    November 17, 2008

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    Very well done and many congrats on the deserved Gold placing here. This is perfect for the contest, great flow too. Best to you.
    Mouser


  • Veronica Leigh
    November 16, 2008
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    Awww this is so good. Very clever


  • Katie Lazette
    November 16, 2008

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    Bravo my friend, take a bow. This is beautifully penned. We all need to pratice the golden rule more than we do. I've seen many people hurt by a snide remark, or a laugh.


  • Susan John Francis
    November 14, 2008
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    A bang on the truth... Reality touches ...nice write..
    Best of luck with the contest..


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    November 13, 2008

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    I am speechless. Wow. You are very insightful. Umm, you do have me tearing up. This is an amazing write. This will touch many. Thank you for entering and good luck!


  • Legend silver member
    November 13, 2008

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    Once more you grace my screen with a poetic master piece
    I love every single word I never find hardship in reading your work as it flows so well one needs not think, just read and enjoy
    Excellent


  • suseann
    November 13, 2008
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    Bravo!

    Spot on flow and wise too boot. Flavorite lines-

    /"So once more hold that giggle please,
    For ridicule’s a vile disease."
    "To others do not as THEY would,
    But treat them as you know you should,"/

    This sort of discerning high road line of thought. Won the Presidency this time round. Maybe now we can get back some American self respect.
    This is as always,a masterful write penned in that same vein.






  • suseann
    November 13, 2008

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    I for one,await the masterful text of poetic perrrrfections I've come to know. Nothin like a lill' pressure uh? Ha!

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