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Broken Heart

I sit here alone
Like you said I’d never be
This feeling of happiness
Is creeping up on me
My heart can’t decide
But my mind already has
It has been freed from a prison
like a person from Alcatraz

I waited for you
For longer than you realize
My heart was in two
I was broken from the inside
You weren't standing by me
Like you said you’d be
I lost my faith in you
But now I really see

Even when the world said
You weren’t the one for me
I was blinded by my ignorance
So I just disagreed
Now I finally realize
That I was really wrong
It’s nothing I regret
It has made me strong

Now I am more happy
Than I had ever been before
Now I am more cautious
My heart will break no more : )


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  • MeganDanielleJonas
    November 25, 2008
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    yay! no more heart breaks♥


  • Harlequin Dance
    November 13, 2008

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    Good job on the ending, I liked it.

    In the first stanza, you only have seven lines. The second to last line is missing its rhyming pair.

    Also, the rhythm of the poem sounds awkward at places, and some of the rhymes match up imperfectly. If that went throughout the poem it would be fine, but as it only occurs once or twice, that makes it the exception more than the rule. Is there any way you could fix that?

    Overall, nice job