Ode to the 'beats', and their raspings, their wallowings, their cosmic tongues, their rivers of howling words, their hungry minds, and their bohemian college dorms.
Thank you, thank you, sirs, thank you for your flare of genius, your wisps of vision, violent as they sometimes were, and lonely, always lonely.
Although. Although.
I never liked jazz
endless reels of soul destroying saxophones, bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh bleh, fuck off. -
-the slow clicking of the snare rim, tick tock.
- the circular spiralling melodies, wailing like new-borns, stale and without warmth.
pretentious wannabees goof their toes to an invisable rhythm,
give me drums or give me death,
give me heart and passion,
give me a true music of the people,
Mr oh-so-groovy,
but thank you sirs, for the long haired hipsters and the slick haired roadsters,
for the bearded queers and Marxist narcissists.
for the hallucinations and the holy.
for the the embrace of death,
for crowning of the seasons, and the for the 'beat'.
A contest entry
- STREAM OF CONSCIOUSNESS: by exceptforthis.
550 points, ended November 23, 2008, 10 entries
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The subject is good here but the style kept stepping up and around me I had to read it over a few times to get the total thing ingested. Thanks for your entry best of luck!
Cyb -
well as I am sure you read I adore jazz and this is a perfect personification of the concept of jazz music. Hoever I do not really enjoy the set up of this piece. It seems unorganised but i will definetly consider this piece in judging. good luck!
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This was a great write.I particularly enjoyed the opening line.This piece is riddled with great words and lines and it's brilliantly articulated.Certainly evokes the style of Kerouac and is an impressive write and entry.
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wow, i really enjoyed this. it is hard to describe the feeling from stream of consciousness, free-flowing, almost musical verbosity you have expressed here, it hits a different part of comprehension beyond literary capacities. i loved the second stanza, lots of fluidity and onomatopoeia used very well. thanks for the entry and good luck!
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YES YES YES - that is it!
I never liked jazz either, but im sure it felt a bit different back then!
Seriously - best one in the comp.
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