I’ve lost all vestiges of shame.
I want to touch your very soul.
I want to hear you cry my name.
I am no longer in control.
The taste of you upon my lips
brings madness that can’t be denied.
I feel myself in rapture’s grip
and can’t resist. I have no pride.
Lie with me beneath the stars.
I don’t care who might be there.
These special moments are just ours.
When I’m with you I just don’t care.
Let’s leave the sane world far behind
and reach the heights only lovers know.
Let’s make a place where we’re entwined
and let our inner passions flow.
I need to feel you close to me.
When we’re together I feel whole.
Together let’s find ecstasy.
I am no longer in control.
Author notes
Prompt: Video - John Legend - P.D.A. (We Just Don't Care) (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=M4R_oswROic)
Picture Credit: http://acier-papillon.deviantart.com/art/naked-in-the-woods-again-71417694
20-150 words (129 used 
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A contest entry
- Pop my Quickie Cherry by Disturbed Prodigy.
700 points, ended November 17, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome
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She who falls under a spell of lust
Beautifully penned
Congratulations on the Silver
Best wishes
Julie
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Steamy - very excellent take on your prompt - best of luck in the contest
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I don't know about steamy but hopefully it gave you a smile of remembered times when the madness of love overtook you Thank you for the read and comment...
Ken
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this is amazing and i do mean that you took the prompt and you went with it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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wow this is an outstanding poem.. I really love it a lot. the entire poem is excellent. the imagery is beautiful. the rhyme is flawless and it flows smoothly.. but but I have a question for you.. stanza 4.. umm you like repetition don't you?? lol okay okay so I'm being a bit on the picky side.. repetition drives me insane.. I don't want you to think that I just leave mindless comments on your poems and all. I do really pay attention to them and I go over every line with a fine tooth comb..
good luck in the contest
kat
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