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The difference in Daylight Savings Time

passing in a blink
expanding eternally
gets away from us

hour fast, hour slow
either way, time passes

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  • Hikari Phoenix
    November 13, 2008

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    Indeed, either way time passes. I wish to know what's the menaing of these Daylight savings. Duh!
    Nice write.

    ~Noor


  • Onionducks
    November 13, 2008

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    Short and Thoughty

    I don't know what daylight savings time is, so I can't comment on poem->title relevance. In my opinion, I think it needs some capitals, and some punctuation, but that's just because I'm in annoying "everything has to be grammatically correct" phase (except when it's written by me. Pot calling kettle.... come in kettle.. right?
    I like this poem though, it makes me think about life. Thanks for sharing!

  • Kari gold member
    November 13, 2008

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    First off nice seeing you back

    I know that time passes and sometimes it can go fast and it can go slow but either way it somehow manages to slip away from us...

    Well done