love I gasp your words
like a drowning man inhales
air upon rescue
your voice
fills the yawning void
inside my brittle heart
your kiss validates
my existence
your touch my life line
Author notes
contempoary senyru chain
picture min shack at short beach
constantly reworking this one , truly a work in progress
In a list
A contest entry
- Options for the imagination.. by starblaze.
800 points, ended November 22, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - but not just any kiss... by JinSays.
1532 points, ended September 21, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is lovely my beautiful Annie, thank you my sweet friend and sister.
love,
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my humbe thanks
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thank you for entering
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despite the brevity of the piece there is much deep sentiment within the lines well done and good luck to you.
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thank you
it is haiku format so short is the aim, thank you for you most kind words
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Very good!
Love it -- who'd think like this? Very original and fun! Good work!
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the phone call
thank you, your comments are much valid, and as to the oddness, as we have said before,odd i am
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Sickingingly wonderful. Such imagination with words!
~noor
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thanks
thanks I think
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wow
powerful thoughts and words here my friend! excellent.
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ah shucks
thanks my friend
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