Open blinds set the table
Delicately tatted doily in place
A surprise
whispered hints
welcome changes
Muted green
conical shakers
sparkle
Air releases heated coffee like aromas
cinnamon buns with plenty of
powdered sugar for all
Sun embraces
glistening trickles.
Author notes
This is and always has been one of my favorite experiences.
A contest entry
- first frost by AJ Morelli.
2700 points, ended December 7, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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lovely title the words work really well together i love the use of them too keep writing great poetry!
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the title got me interested. this has such a great sound, all the words play so well together.
and i love the simple happy feeling this gets across. it's harder than it looks to convey an emotion without describing the emotion itself. like, you don't have to say "i'm happy" to convey happiness.
hope that wasn't totally incomprehensible.
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coffee and cinnamon buns, now your talking...
thanks for entering this here
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i really loved the morning's arrival and the thoughts of days long past...
i kind of feel this poem would still retain it's grandure even without the last two lines
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you painted such a cosy image in my mind...i felt like i was there
kind of reminded me of one of those "bed and breakfast" establishments
great job
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OMG! looove the smell of cinnamon buns! ooo this definately has a warm homey feel to it. alomst like grandmas house...she has doilys, and hot coffee and a sugary snack 24/7. i love this piece
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love how u taste on my smell and taste here. dont see a lot of that. well done write here...much love
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Is this what its like for "morning people"? LOL
It sounds like someone put a lot of love into this breakfast, what a great memory! -
I have now come to read this piece twice and I like it even more the second time around.
I enjoyed the fact that you left the majority of the poem vague, allowing your reader to implement their own meanings and experiences into your words. That's quite a handy trick as a writer!
Good luck in the contest -
hmm, it seems to me the tatted doilies are the frost on the window, yes? what a lovely image.
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