As the sun sets over mountaintops of sugar icing
A lone star shines amidst a vast sea of crystal solitude
Smiling at the unfathomable profoundness of this empty space
Author notes
13 November 2008
dedicated to Melodies 
A contest entry
- Give me anything! by ASmileForYou.
560 points, ended December 16, 2008, 138 entries
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You work best at shorter pieces. This is so much stronger and holds my attention a lot more than the other one did. -
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thank you!
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short and sweet, a very nice dedication to a nice lady. Thank you so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest... Scott
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A very nice write! Extraordinarily short, but tells all it needs to! Very nice!
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Short little ditty, but well done I think
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Breathtaking
So few words but contains profound and beautiful
imagery Ann, my kind of poetry. I think you should
call it "Venus" the imagery is similar to that of my
"Darwin's Chair" poem.Herzliche Gruesse George -
What a grand piece of writing, there is so much imagery crammed into three little lines. I enjoyed this very much. Best to you dear Bandit
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Thank you!
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yea your poem is AWESOMENEST it just wants a title...
I love it
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Oh, wow. This was truly amazing. I really loved the short length, and the heavy descriptions throughout the whole piece. The only suggestion I have for you, is thinking of a title. I think you could come up with a really amazing title that would make this piece feel more complete. Amazing job.
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Thanks. You're right... But I don't do a very good job at finding titles for my poems, so most of them are "untitled" for a long time...
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Another good untitled poem!
wow!!! this is another good untitled poem!!! and you described the words perfectly!! keep it up!!! -Slick
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Delighted! A very fashionable poem with a touch of winter's crystal beauty, mixed with smiles and a sunset! You also mention sugar, so this is a poem that will please everyone! 
I love it, you know.
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I am speechless. I will never be able to put into words how much I can relate to this poem.
Thank you so much for sharing it
Ellie
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