When cobalt blue, blankets night
North Star pierces, darkness bright.
Death shroud mist of freezing air
suspending life in frozen flair.
Sunrise shatters darkest blue
revealing crystal floras hue.
Autumn sighs, in loss bereft
as winter blows, first cold breath.
Author notes
Prompt: First Frost
40 Words Exactly
In a list
- 31 to 40 Words • next in list
- Autumn • next in list
- Bronze • next in list
- Nature • next in list
- Winter • next in list
A contest entry
- The Never Ending Rhyme Pre-Writes Allowed Contest by piccola.
700 points, ended February 14, 34 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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ah, lovely almost dainty write on the word prompt, well done indeed, thank you for entering
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This is so amazing... short but just awesome. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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I adore this. I think it's fantastic. There are a couple of things that I'm not sure on, but that's because I'm an idiot, not anything else: penultimate line, I don't think sighs needs an apostrophe because you're not eliminating a letter, nor is it owning anything. Last line: winters blows. I'm not sure both need the "s"s. Either "winter blows" or "winters blow." I think it's the former you need. Anyway, like I said, not 100%. Anyway, on to pleasenter (I know that isn't a word!) things! I adore this piece. I thinks it's clever, I think it's unique and it's a brilliant read. Great job, thanks for entering it!
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Hoodwinked !
This is a wonderful topical nature write, great word choice enhances the delightful imagery. I like the couplet format, it gives the piece punch. Well done,
write on!
You have been Hoodwinked today by the Poetic Bandits because WE CARE!
Dennis
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Now this is a first snow if ever I read one, beautiful flow and rhyme to this one. Best to you in the contest
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this is good
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ahhh the death of autumn. This again is rich in imagery and paints a picture in the reader's mind. Thank you for the pleasure of reading and thanks for the entry
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this is good
I love the rhyming scheme does so well
mist in freezing air how each line rhymes so perfectly like a shape a checkerboard
winter blows first cold breath
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a very nice entry here... i love the word cobalt
thanks for entering it here
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beautiful
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this is a great poem, it sings as much it is well written...excellent job
mal
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beautiful imagery!!
I really like the imagery in the first stanza. beautiful
good luck
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ooh this is awesome, and i love the flow. read really smooth, great job. much love and respect.
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Excellent!
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this poem is really good
keep writing
your friend,
-Daniel Ploss-
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