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The Market

In the middle of the street,
The market bustles with sellers
Of brightly coloured yarn.


A man plays the flute, another sings,
Cafes are full of people talking,  
Eating and drinking.


As night falls the sound intensifies,
The atmosphere fills with melodies 
Multicultural, sublime.


The tambourine plays to the beat

Of the drum, and a toothless old man

Nods his head and grins.

A contest entry

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  • Hebz
    June 17

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    Very nice, like the images

    Thnx for entering & best of luck

    GloriousGift
    Hebz


  • swimmeroks
    January 5
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    Very descriptive...Very nice.


  • Stevie.me
    December 9, 2008

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    I really like this poem.

    I really like this poem. I would like to know more about the smell of the food in the market ,as well as their texture, and what ever other sensory info might enrich the poem.

    Stevie.me

    • harriet567
      December 9, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your comment and suggestions for ideas to add to the atmosphere of the market. Bless you, Harriet


  • Manoj Sanyal
    November 29, 2008

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    The market scene well captured.
    Best wishes and good luck,

  • piccola silver member
    November 26, 2008

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    this is very colorful and filled with gorgeous imagery. It lets the reader be there, seeing and hearing everything. thank you for your entry

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