I think I knew your soul before
Back in an ancient time...
Your ape-like self gave me a pear
And put a hand in mine.
I think I must have known you when
The world was new and flat.
When I...an Egyptian princess,
And you...cared for my cat!
While traveling across the desert
I came upon your tent,
You offered wine and shelter
Before on the road I went.
I think I was upon the seas
And you a pirate brave.
Swashbuckling, brash, and cunning,
A bold and daring knave.
I think I was an African slave,
I know I must have been.
Of course, you helped me to escape
Because you were my friend.
I think I knew your soul before,
I think I know it still.
I bet I'll know your soul again.
I bet I always will.
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Excellent
I agree with the concept of multiple past lives as you describe in this piece. Quite a spectrum from princess to slave with your soul mate in each. Loved it. I too think of myself as an old soul.
Take care,
Michael
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Light, airy and easy to read. A great expression of someone is like your insides. Always there. Great job xxx
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Do you know? How simple and wonderfully satisfying this is?? Just wanted to say that. Trouble with old met souls is that they sometimes run and hide. Ok, that'll be me then..... x Loved this
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You know, I was talking about this with another one a while back, and I have the same feelings about that person. I truly believe I knew his soul in another lifetime also. This is great! I love it!
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Cool
This is really good. Every paragraph is brilliant. My best paragraph would be this one. :While traveling across the desert
I came upon your tent,
You offered wine and shelter
Before on the road I went.
Well done for this fabulous poem! Keep up the good work!
Lana
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This was interesting and different. I liked the way it flowed and all came together in the end.
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Great!
I really like this! It was interesting and creative and lovely. Great write! -
Reincarnation!
My fiancee firmly believes in it, and I am open to the idea and this piece is brilliant and sweet. I think it would be awesome if your soulmate has always been and will always be yours.
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The eighth line needs another bump to its rythem. It also is a bit abrupt. How about:
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this is very enjoyable and very true. Lots of people claim to have known people before. it tears at the question and makes you wonder. most people have met someone that they connect to very well so they wonder if theyve known them before. Very interesting twist you took on this poem. i never read a poem about these beleifs before. i like it very much. it flows well, no cheap rhyming and your right on topic. This is very good!
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I just flat out enjoyed this
This poem was enjoyable, funny, philosophical and entertaining all at once. I just liked reading it so I give you applause.
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wow that was....sweet.
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A little obvious with the endline rhyme, and sometimes, strickingly cliche. Not bad rhythm though. Thanks for entering, but not what I'm looking for at this time.
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amazing
this is right up my street, its perfect its something that most people strive for but never manage to come up with its clever well written and the last four lines are amazing, well well done take care kathrin x
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love this ending I think I knew your soul before,
I think I know it still.
I bet I'll know your soul again.
I bet I always will.
and this part:
I think I was upon the seas
And you a pirate brave.
Swashbuckling, brash, and cunning,
A bold and daring knave.
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i really like you imagination in this poem...!!! super duper awesome
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Reminds me of the Choctaw Indians
And their belief that those souls you connect with are souls you've met in previous lives/other dimensions, other places...those you 'click' with are meant to be with you, and those that don't have never been in your circle. That's how they think of life and death - one big repeated circle.
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Is death a time of wandering , searching for that soul who completes us .If but for a short time in life.Of all those we could select from why do some find the right one and others spend eternities searching?
She who i saw as my soulmate now walks a different path hopefully when i step upon it she will be there waiting
A wonderful piece
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