Souls trapped within dirt
many cracks lost in time,
shining light brings hope
to a broken, fractured mind.
Straining hard to reach
through corrupted rage
the simple goals of life
burn inside each page.
Gripping darkness smother's
dusted air splits with tension
as lights dangle brightly
the door to new dimensions.
Ground by daily habits
the need to break away
the mind is over willing
but the body makes you stay.
Author notes
Picture credit: Four_Questions_by_Operaghost1
Just letting out frustrations..lol. Trying to say how the mind wants to change and move on but the body is incapable for whatever reason...if you get that, meh I confused myself...lol
Would love to be your dark sister! 
Glad you like it here...the addiction will still grow on you 
A contest entry
- In search.... by Black Rayne.
700 points, ended November 27, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the biggest prewrite contest ever by serenity silvermoon.
900 points, ended January 18, 367 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I can see who calls cos I'm nosy, so be nice and comment.
Comments
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How true... I know what that feels like. Mind says "move on" but the body... Just keeps yelling "noooooo" or vice versa... Ugh!that sure makes things hard don't it!
Great job on this one!
Thanks for entering this contest!
Best of luck to you in this contest!
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great poem and i got what you meant it to feel that way as well my legs want to get up and move but the rest of me dont you have a great poem here great job on the gold trophy oh and when you said you wanted to be my sister was you talking to me or the other person either way i will be a part of your family to if you want i love family
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Very interesting..it is true how when the mind is
willing the body disagrees! I like the dark feeling
this poem produces. Congrats on winning the gold
trophy..thank you also for the comment
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Love it! Wonderful wording and images!
Congrats on the Gold too!!
I especially like,
'Ground by daily habits
the need to break away
the mind is over willing
but the body makes you stay.'
Great job!!
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What feelings reap within
Darkness of moods
Love this one Sis
Best wishes and good luck in the contest
Julie x
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What an acutely-described feeling...
It makes me want to burst out of a figurative chrysalis and live a different life free of procrastination and shit.
:C
Jessica
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I totally get that!!!! Nice
hunny.. I know exactly what you mean with this!! Superbly written as always.. really struck me hard!!
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Yet another masterpiece! I really loved reading this. It has a sense of darkness and hopelessness that really fits. There was just one line that didn't really make sense to me. The first line of stanza 3, is it supposed to be Gripping darkness smothers instead of"Gripping darkness smoother's" ?
I loved shining light brings hope/to a broken, fractured mind.
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You are right, thanks
I need a spell check that can read my mind Either that or type slower 
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I love reading your poetry! You have become the princess of darkness with you fantastic masterpieces.
P.
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lol, i know this picture, i love what you did with it better, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Whoa!!! Love this...
So deliciously dark & brooding with a table spoon of foreboding for good measure...
Great, rhyme, narrative & wordplay/choice/use, as always...
Well done!!!
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Incredible as always my dear!!
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