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I Wish

I wish upon the shooting star
  burning through the night like a midnight sun
I wish upon the coin
  falling through water like a feather in a gentle breeze

I wish upon the stone
  kissing it's slippery surface softly
I wish upon the clover
  caressing it so cautiously

I wish upon superstition
  and objects of the sort
I wish and wish and wish,
  they still remain unfulfilled

I wish upon anything
  to bring your love closer to me
But no luck, or love
  is ever wished towards me

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  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 23, 2008

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    aw...I really like this piece! every stanza has the strength to stand on it's own ...beautiful write


    *clappy


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    Liked the sentiments you expressed in these lines; glad to see you writing again. Keep at it.Think the repetition works well in these lines.


  • Sweet-Sins
    November 13, 2008
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    woooow- i wish for a lot!!
    xx